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kittyj
Junior Member
since 2000-04-17
Posts 32
CANADA

0 posted 2000-04-25 01:03 PM


And I hope you're thinking of me,
as I wander down your street
Laughter escapes me,
as I think of the time you left
88 gummy bears, leading to the tree
where you first kissed me.
The only good memory I can force out.
The rest, overshadowed by black tears,
one for each piece of my soul,
consumed by you.

The king of contradictions.
The master of deception.
All of the hanging heads,
left in your wake.
The life, the magick,
consumed by you.


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Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
1 posted 2000-04-25 05:22 PM


Sounds like a deceiver, and a user, anyway that's what you have shone here.
This is an interesting poem, You seem to remember the one and only good time that you had, and that's good.
all in all this is a good expression.
Joel.

 I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

kristi
Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 33
Yulee, FL
2 posted 2000-04-26 12:25 PM


Some men can be so cruel.  Don't give up.
There are some good one's out there!  Good poem!

AVANTI
Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
3 posted 2000-04-26 02:16 AM


well written...keep it up

 If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
4 posted 2000-04-26 02:38 PM


Being comsumed by the few good memories is normally what keep us stuck in the situation we are in.  Yet "good" memories are nice to keep in a safe little place, untouched by the world. Keep hoping and someday all will get better and that "man" will show up.  The man of your "dreams" that is.  

Peace
Dark_kisses


 I do not love you for being perfect.....
I love you for being perfect for me!!


dhuron
Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

5 posted 2000-04-27 08:41 PM


Great poem, sometimes I wish I could force out a good memory..but often times not.

Wonderfully Done

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