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~On the stony path you knelt~
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~On the stony path you knelt~ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia 
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Your love, it was deeply felt < !signature-->Upon the stony path you knelt Never did you utter a word or if you did it was not heard Your love was cold she had no life You had come to make her your wife What you saw on that fateful day Was a lifeless figure, you began to pray Pray that this was not what you were seeing Pray your loved one was not this being There was no breath or heartbeat found Your own heart to would no longer pound For on this day your heart did break And your own life you did take Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 04-22-2000).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow - tracie... This was powerful. I can relate to weel to the pain and devistation of finding love dead. Wonderful poem. Michael |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
He should have taken her out instead. This one of the biggest fears in a man is will she except my heart in the time I ask her to be mine forever. It's also a catch 22. Fear if she say's yes and fear if she say's no. Can't win. Joel. For this I howl. I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
so sad a tale... good work  A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Michael~ Thanks for WoW. This was one of those that just popped into my head one night and I jotted it down. Reminded me of nights and maidens, I could picture a fair maiden lying cold upon a stony path and her knight arriving to only find her dead.  a little morbid hey...Tracie~ Joel~ Loved your reply don't howl my friend  Tracie~ Isis~ Thankyou my friend Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Kurly Junior Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 48 |
Nice poem, it has a very profound meaning of what trajedy really is. |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
A classic tragic tale nicely told "Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time that you've never had it before." ~author unknown~ |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
crud, I see it now! I had to reread this, I knew I was missing something here it was haunting me. I had to come back, I was stuck in my own world with my brains up my back side. hahaha I had the misfortune to find one of my students lifeless one morning, it is a truly sad thing. If my life I could have traded I would have, she was only 17. I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
i am so glad to hear that this wasn't about someone you knew..... that would be horrible. what a piece this is.. i am loving it!!! *****kynder The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Kurly~ Glad you enjoyed reading this Tracie~ Tess~ Thanks for your sweet reply, glad you liked it Tracie~ Dear Joel~ That is a tragedy, so young Hug Tracie~ Kynder~ You are so kind thanks for your lovely words Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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