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AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE

0 posted 2000-04-17 04:31 PM


Never again...

I can’t look into your without feelings pain,
It’s hard to believe you even it may be the truth
Tears, they flow but the pain never ceases
And still in my dreams I cry
Never again, will things ever be the same?

We took a walk well at least we tried...
The steps keep getting heavier...
In search of lands beyond the present
I fear for what we both may find
Never again, will I ever feel better?

While we embraced still I was cold...
You held my hand still I felt numb
Still every time I look away, you catch a glimpse
And yet my heart sinks when you call
Never again...?



 If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

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Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
1 posted 2000-04-17 04:47 PM


At the end of each stanza you ask a question.
1. No things will never be the same.
2. Yes you will feel better in time.
3. yes it will be again, but not the same.
Anguish rises in a futile journey with someone dispassionate, on a lonely path.
Joel.

 I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

dhuron
Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

2 posted 2000-04-17 04:52 PM


Very Good Avanti, I really like this one

 The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson


AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
3 posted 2000-04-18 09:54 AM


joel...those were rethorical...but anyways...thanx
thanx dhuron for reading...
and i really liked the one you put on the workshop...simply great


 If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

Shandelier
Junior Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 22
Canada
4 posted 2000-04-18 10:56 AM


Nicely done AVANTI!  I can relate.

Shandelier

HelenaJ
Member
since 2000-04-04
Posts 81
Kitchener, ont. Canada
5 posted 2000-04-18 11:16 AM


I'll agree with the others. Well done!

helena

 The words that come to me here fail me elsewhere.
Mute.
Made dumb by my own thoughts.
Tonguetied and awkward.
Tripping over my own voice.
A pen and paper for my voice.

HelenaJ

AVANTI
Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
6 posted 2000-04-18 01:13 PM


Thank you shandelier and helenaJ...
for understanding
glad you guys liked it


 If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

7 posted 2000-04-19 02:23 AM


hi there my poetic pal...Im here finally  
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While we embraced still I was cold...
You held my hand still I felt numb
Still every time I look away, you catch a glimpse
And yet my heart sinks when you call
Never again...?

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you ask all the right questions of your heart in this perfect piece...and as you already know(since your so wise)....
only your heart can answer them.
excellent poem Avanti!!!
never say never..right???
take care, jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon



Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
8 posted 2000-04-19 07:14 AM


Oh to have the strength to say "Never Again".
This was a great poem, Avanti.  Love the way you ended it as a question.

Michael

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