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xEmperorEmber Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 136tx |
I am all but fitting You are all the rage Listing all my pity You take none of my pain And yet here I fall Just as numb as before For you glances I crawl I slip slightly more The light on a dark canvas Has just left me dead Leaving all that we made us For days I bled say you will... say you cant... just give up... and let me stand... Tommarrow always brings a new day Left surrounded but hallow Forever this eternal price I will pay God I feel so shallow |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
"The light on a dark canvas Has just left me dead Leaving all that we made us For days I bled" God how well I know this. very good. Joel. I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Welcome to Dark Passions. Great first poem. This seems to fit my mood to a T today too. Wonderful work, hope to see more from you soon. Michael |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Welcome to Passions. This is a wonderful first posting. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
xE~ Welcome to Passions!  this is a great first post! Will look for more from you.-SEA |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
really really good Emperor! I dunno, just like love your style of writing! love, Virgin Suïcide... "I love the way you love, but I hate the way, I'm supposed to love you back..." Love is hard to live... Try to live life in love.... |
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eegood Junior Member
since 1999-11-16
Posts 41Chicago,IL |
simply commanding... |
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