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HelenaJ
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since 2000-04-04
Posts 81
Kitchener, ont. Canada

0 posted 2000-04-15 11:17 AM



When we live with no surroundings
When we dream with no thought
Lingering in a place of confusion
Tripping on words of truth
Regret eating every step
Painted pictures of times
that never will be
Starring at stars
Wishing on pain
Seen clearly through
the nothing that engulfs us
Embraces
Enthrawls

© Copyright 2000 Jenn - All Rights Reserved
NamelessOne
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 197
Biloxi MS
1 posted 2000-04-15 02:42 PM


Enthrawls ,thats a good word to describe what your poem does, what it did to me. I espically liked the part "wishing on pain seen clearly through the nothing that engulfs us" ,that to me was so descriptive of the emptiness that is usually so close at hand.I can so relate to this work...thank you for this.
Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
2 posted 2000-04-15 04:58 PM


Again someone knows my dreams.
great.
Joel.

 I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

HelenaJ
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since 2000-04-04
Posts 81
Kitchener, ont. Canada
3 posted 2000-04-15 07:17 PM


thanks guys. I appreciate the kind words. Even better coming from two great writers!
If I were more computer literate I'd give a gracious smile. Sorry!

 The words that come to me here fail me elsewhere.
Mute.
Made dumb by my own thoughts.
Tonguetied and awkward.
Tripping over my own voice.
A pen and paper for my voice.

HelenaJ

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4 posted 2000-04-15 10:18 PM


Sometimes, dreams can come true. . . if we only believe. . .

Wonderful poem. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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