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sex life of a raindrop |
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NamelessOne Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 197Biloxi MS |
Sex life of a raindrop primal forces of earth converge in union with star sent warmth the precious water of life drawn skyward coalescing,uniting,forming this raindrop birth experience an entity with one mission,though it knows not what in legion with like kind,awaiting it`s time of erotic escape mutual attraction begins the descent into understanding and longing for flight,they as one almost fluid Seized by gravity the copulation bringing sweet release from the heavens they tumble oblivious to all but themselves as two lovers entwined listening to the beat of their hearts and the rain on the window. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Nameless~ I do so love the rain.....never thought of it THAT way before!  Great poem!-SEA |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Very different.  )Sounds like fun, I want to do that. Very good. Joel. I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this is the first work of yours that i have had the pleasure of reading (the last three weeks of the semester are not at all fun...) but i thought it was absolutely wonderful. you're talking about when they kind of melt together, right? this has so many great words. i loved it. jann elizabeth Love is so short, and forgetting so long. -Pablo Neruda |
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NamelessOne Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 197Biloxi MS |
Thanks for the replies SEA --still trying to think of how to make you scream  Joel--i`d definitely give that a try but i might bring a parachute just in case Jannel--Exactly my point,hope to see you more when schools done. thanks |
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isiskate81 Junior Member
since 2000-04-14
Posts 31 |
I think your poem was beautiful and real. I hope to read more of your poetry later. |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
wow. this is so neat. shows the intertwining of nature & human so many disregard. love this. *****kynder quote: |
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sKiTtLeS Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 113wisconsin, u.s.a. |
Definately interesting. Can't wait for the next spring storm to come about! I always knew there was something sexy about rain! sKiTtLeS~ "Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened." -the words of a friend |
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HelenaJ Member
since 2000-04-04
Posts 81Kitchener, ont. Canada |
wow! this one deserves a professional critique which is something i myself am not qualified for, but in my opinion...wow. I've always loved the rain but I think I will now have more of an intoxicating affect on me if you know what i mean! The words that come to me here fail me elsewhere. Mute. Made dumb by my own thoughts. Tonguetied and awkward. Tripping over my own voice. A pen and paper for my voice. HelenaJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
This is excellent... I've always liked the rain too. . .and now I have one more reason to! Wonderful poem. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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