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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Then come to me... I wait for you with weary eyes... You walk my way...still in disguise... I called out to you a million times... And with the breeze your words came back... "Then come to me”...you softly whispered... When night shall fall...and all asleep... The moon is watching...the stars await another..." We’ll ride the heavens...while hell does freezes... why rush me now...?just let me float... To lands with no pain..where lies a hope... Where till dawn I’ll Waltz with the smile in mind And hand in hand...all dressed...in dreams... The music plays...and in your arms... "Then come to me...this time a voice... Where sorrows vanish...so far away... Just lay your head...and feel so light... Close your eyes...and feel the music... Then come to me...nightly asleep Where stars await...another one..." Then come to me...then come to me... death... "To all those who read...this is not about suicide...BIG NO ON THAT...LIFE'S FOR LIVING... THIS POEM...it's for someone whose ailing...and waits for the god of death to take him to be with his love... please don't misunderstand..." for any whom i may have offended... My humble apologies...always...AVANTI < !signature--> If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao [This message has been edited by AVANTI (edited 04-12-2000).] |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Avanti I’ve written short stories with the same topic, Loves that have passed on, and wishing to be with them hearing the call to come home with them. Beautifully written, Beautifully expressed. It’s not really my place to ask you But, Please never apologize on the same page with emotions like this. Joel. [This message has been edited by Joel the wolf (edited 04-09-2000).] |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx joel... I just did'nt want anyone to get a suicide idea...and i'm glad you liked it... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I wait for you with weary eyes... You walk my way...still in disguise... I called out to you a million times... And with the breeze your words came back... "Then come to me”...you softly whispered... When night shall fall...and all asleep... The moon is watching...the stars await another..." We’ll ride the heavens...while hell freezes... Why? Whisk me away...softly let me float To lands with no pain..where lies a hope... --------------------- THIS IS SO AWESOME!!!!! you are deep in it here...way cool poem Avanti...very cool. very well written. You must have an inspiration tree growing...  superb my poetic pal...perfection from your pen. take care, jm ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Avanti, I agree with janet. Perfection from your pen. Most Excellent poem. The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship." --Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Avanti, Excellent work!! Powerful, gripping, and very emotional. I hope your friend finds an end to the pain. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx Janet...I'am glad you liked it... dhuron thanx too... I'am happy to express through words... and lone wolf...i have to say noone ever called my work gripping... it's wonderful feeling...the word gives me a high...thanx all of you... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A very soothing rhythmic flow. James |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Powerful, emotional piece Avanti, I hope your friend finds the peace they seek, and indeed is reunited with past loved ones.. Great work! A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Avanti~ I didn't feel this had anything to do with suicide.....it felt more like a lovers cry....quite stunning-SEA |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Hauntingly beautiful poem. I can totally relate to the vantage point it is written from. Very well done, Avanti. Michael |
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Caitlin Junior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 15 |
Avanti, I love it...can't believe I almost missed it! A feeling we're all too familiar w/ in this life, you molded our emotions into words perfectly!  |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx jmlee...you know i wanted someone to notice the rythm in it...  thanx Isis...always good to know your view on the verses...it's gives moe direction to me... SEA...true it's more like a lovers cry...but still would'nt want anyone to react to it...or it being deleated so I explained... Michael...you've given me reason to smile... haunting i was going for it!!! hey caitlin...welcome...more light in the forum...i say that always... I'm gald you loved it... see you around... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nicely done...sending you an e-mail on it |
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