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Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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Lansing, MI USA

0 posted 2000-04-05 12:34 PM


I hope you know my heart is breaking
   due to this extreme aching
   that I feel deep within my chest
   the pain keeps me from getting rest

Each day the pain grows more intense
   as I try to make sense
   out of what we're going through
   not much else will do

We just can't seem to agree
   on how things should be
   they could be like this or that
   if we could get through a day without a spat

This just doesn't seem possible
   how could things be this horrible
   we set out with the best intent
   now it's time to repent

For the things said and done
   each and every single one
   wash away all the sins
   so we can be whole again


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 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

© Copyright 2000 Jennifer L. Garcia - All Rights Reserved
dhuron
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since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

1 posted 2000-04-05 12:58 PM


Very Dark and Deep Lone Wolf,

I hope that time will heal all your pain and wounds.

daniel

 The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson


danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
2 posted 2000-04-05 03:30 PM


very good, and great flow. sometimes it is needed, to step back, releast it all, and try to start anew. other times, it's just not enough. i hope that is all it takes for you. great work.
Lone Wolf
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Lansing, MI USA
3 posted 2000-04-05 07:38 PM


Daniel,
Thank you....I am feeling dark and reaching deep these days.  I can only hope time will heal and be merciful.

danni,
thank you and that is why I write.  To try to work out those feelings.  I am not sure if it is enough yet or not.  Time will tell.


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-04-05 09:34 PM


No one deserves to feel this way ever, hope it all works out for the best...  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Sven
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5 posted 2000-04-05 11:24 PM


LW, sometimes, it just takes time. . .

Excellent words my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
6 posted 2000-04-06 11:13 PM


Isis.... I agree 100% that no one should feel this way ever.  I hope it does too, but it is in the hands of fate now.

Sven....thank you....they are just my feelings.  I hope that with time the sins will be washed away and forgiven by all.  Maybe a new start is on the horizon for he and I.  Who knows?  Anything is possible, right?  

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Night Chica
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 39
Vermont
7 posted 2000-04-06 11:18 PM


Lone Wolf,

That was full of emotion and portrayed wonderfully.  I've been where you are before.  I know how painful it can be when things start to turn out that way.  I hope that you find happiness soon again.

~* Megs *~

 I was never one to patiently pick up broken fragments and glue them together again and tell myself that the mended whole was as good as new. What is broken is broken- and I'd rather remember it as it was at its best than mend it and see the broken places as long as I lived.

-- Margaret Mitchell

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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Lansing, MI USA
8 posted 2000-04-07 10:00 PM


Megs....thank you for the comment.  I hope I do too.  The pain is unbearable.  We will see.  Hey, welcome to Passions!!  

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
9 posted 2000-04-08 12:06 PM


Emotion sure flows from this peom.  Hope things get better soon.
~~~~Lone Wolf, take care of that heart of yours.
dh

Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
10 posted 2000-04-08 05:06 PM


Lone Wolf
you are not truly alone.
we the pack will howl a mournful sound to the moon at midnight for you.
Just to let the wind carry our notes of harmony and friendship to your ears.
Write on.
Joel.

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
11 posted 2000-04-08 08:50 PM


Danny....thank you and yes, those are my emotions up there.  What is left of them.  I hope it gets better too, but don't think so.  I will take care of it Danny, I will.  

Joel....thank you fellow wolf brother.  I hear your song loud and clear.  Music to my ears.  I will write on.

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

12 posted 2000-04-09 07:45 PM


I don't know what you're going through but I can assure you, your words are needed. Two weeks ago, I wanted to die, and I'm here...writing....and the poems I am writing now are deeper, richer, and more special to me than any I've ever written.....and I am writing them because I chose to live...and what an excellent choice (right?)

I loved it.


 Kathleen


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