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Monster in Control...
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Monster in Control... |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
your really on a roll says your monster in control your taking uncertain risks and at the sight of you we all just cant resist pudgy sense of urgency life is safer on the outer rim its only part of the could have been pretend your dying.. pretend your hiding with pictures in the sea washed ashore whispering nothing as a final plea |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
your taking uncertain risks and at the sight of you we all just cant resist pudgy sense of urgency life is safer on the outer rim its only part of the could have been pretend your dying.. pretend your hiding with pictures in the sea ------------ powerful words here jac, damn powerful, and deep take care jm she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough, and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in. ...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me... and I feel like somethings gonna give... and I'm a little bit angry. matchbox20 |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
the jackal... very controlled...the monster must be... i liked it... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
well done! i liked this one very much! |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Powerful Poem I liked reading it |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
my fav. line was..."with pictures in the sea" Joy |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
Good job. I enjoyed reading this...catchy title |
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