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For_Never
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since 1999-10-27
Posts 125
Cincinnati, oh, United States of America

0 posted 2000-03-30 11:51 PM


who are we..when we came..
came to realize...
all we are..is not at all..
when the face of pain belies the fall...
And so we walk, heads held high...hiding from ourselves..
Heaven to be seen..
and hell wrought within...
so things are never what they seem...
Death alone, our hands shall hold...
as truth is but a stagnant stream..
Run away now...can't face it..
can't make us see who we really are..
Run away now... won't see..
and so we all die lost..

And to God, this trait we came..
came to realize...
it was he who blessed us with this mess..
and a will to socialize...
As so go now..can't replace it..
You are who you are..
run away child..it is coming..
Bearing to you your scars..
run away now... don't face..
makes you see who you really are..

..oh..
it's late...
To late to try...
to try and run away...
scramble for that last breath...
What a mess..
Now it's time to die...
...click...

Edward A. Beerman


[This message has been edited by For_Never (edited 03-31-2000).]

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Lily B
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since 2000-03-31
Posts 91
Auburn, IN, US
1 posted 2000-03-31 01:21 AM


I particularly like the last words:

..oh..
it's late...
Too late to try...
to try and run away...
scramble for that last breath...
What a mess..
Now it's time to die...


It makes you think!




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2 posted 2000-03-31 03:04 AM


FN~ this gave me chills!-SEA
Aiden Kelly
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 148
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3 posted 2000-03-31 07:33 PM


suicide?  wow!!! that's a powerful poem!!!  i like your style....the stream of consciousness type thing...awesome!!!  
For_Never
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since 1999-10-27
Posts 125
Cincinnati, oh, United States of America
4 posted 2000-04-01 01:20 AM


Thanks, although this hasn't anything to do with suicide, It was meant to scare...scare the mundane, the mundane out of those who care not....not of who they are...who they turlly are.. Hiding from one's self is hje worse thing that I can imagine....time everlast leaves time....time for all things concidered...

EAB

danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
5 posted 2000-04-01 12:44 PM


absolutely incredible piece. powerful words to make you think, on a very good point. excellent!
AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
6 posted 2000-04-02 12:32 PM


"And so we walk, heads held high...hiding from ourselves..
Heaven to be seen..
and hell wrought within...
so things are never what they seem...
Death alone, our hands shall hold...
as truth is but a stagnant stream.."

good work...very powerful theme...



 If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

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