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dhuron
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since 2000-03-19
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0 posted 2000-03-28 03:46 PM



I feel the life
being sucked out of me
My mind losing
my soul darkening

My heart ripped open
Bleeding With Sorrow
Pain with every beat
Uncontrollable shivers

Sitting here
Reflecting on the past
Pain, Sadness
All I know

Waiting for
my Impending Doom
How I want it
To Leave this world

I wish to banish my heart
Lock it up for eternity
So I won't have to feel the pain
So I won't feel anything

Why Have a heart
For people to hurt you
Feel pain everyday
Know nothing but Sorrow

“Friends” betray
They strike fatal
blows. They leave
you all alone.

Love, a horrid
trick in this world
Corrupted!
Untrue and evil

Strangers,
my closets friends
have become
Distant and uncaring

Punished
I am being punished
for a past life.
Eternally punished

Death,
a mercy, not
available to me
Agony is mine

Choking!
every second
Inching towards
Death, slowly ruthlessly

Trapped forever,
Karma has such vengeance
I am to suffer the perpetual
wrath of Karma and Fate



 The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson


© Copyright 2000 Daniel Huron - All Rights Reserved
Sandra Cox
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since 2000-03-24
Posts 48
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1 posted 2000-03-28 04:23 PM


A very dark poem, wonderfully written.  Things cannot really be that bleak can they?

Best Wishes
Sandra

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2 posted 2000-03-28 05:03 PM


dhron~ Wow....... if you feel as though you are being punished for a past life, then maybe you might want to be REAL nice this time so you don't have to do this again! No, really, this was an excellent poem. Karma has a way of bringing good things to your heart too. Don't close your heart.-SEA
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
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3 posted 2000-03-28 06:45 PM


Wonderful work, past failings etc.  The Karma thing is true, what you send out good or bad, comes back times three.  You think rotten, mean, hatefully, it comes back in your life as darkness etc.
Great work  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



dhuron
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since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

4 posted 2000-03-28 07:20 PM


Thank you all.*S*

Sandra, at one point yes it was much worse.  This Poem reflects my darkest period.

Sea and Isis, thanks for your words.

This was the hardest poem for me to write, emotional it was straining, I could feel the tears as i wrote but I am glad I did write it.  By writing this poem, some of that past hurt seems to have been removed.


Hope, tears, and renewal
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since 2000-03-27
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5 posted 2000-03-29 04:34 PM


Wonderful poem.  I wish you luck in finding hope... keep looking, I swear it's out there.
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