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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
how could you go and leave me all that I have left inside how could you act so selfishly after all the times i tried to love you and save you everytime- i forgave you and now i try to hate you i try to separate you from my heart from my mind from myself but i find even though you'll never need me though i know you'll never care though you meant to lead, mislead me in my thoughts you're always there damn these thoughts that fill my head i picture you and wish you dead or never born naive vision never torn by your sweet words by your lies by your loving lying eyes never would i hear you say forever you would love one tear is quite a price to pay i've spent more than enough you asked me did i want you yes but now, i want you gone i want you far away from me further... past the dawn and i'll drift to where you've left me all that i have left inside how could you treat my heart this way the tears still haven't dried in my heart in my mind in myself where i find even though you don't hold me even though no love's shared though i curse what you told me your image lingers there damn these thoughts that fill my head i curse your tongue those lies you said damn the dreams you gave me and what am i to do with all these feelings left inside these memories of you |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
wow sweetie! this is good! i can't pinpoint anything cuz i love the whole thing! so much to this -- passion and pain. (just asking...something happen..? just curious...love ya!) great work, hon!  |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Very powerful poem forceful images all pushing their way at you overwhelming very good liked very much Pure thought trying Stabs at the mind Looking for weakness A tiny flaw In an infinite space yet we fight Given to the purity We battle out Hearts battle horn Encapsulating enemies Evolved perfection without purity Mindless emotion Purest love From Walter Did you write the Book of Love And do you have faith in God above If the Bible tells you so Do you believe in rock 'n roll Can music save your mortal soul And can you teach me how to dance real slow |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
This was great !! "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
thank you all very much. walter, that was beautiful. aiden... no, this is an old one. everything is quite peachy in the world right now. if you ever want to hear the story though, it's an interesting one. thanks again.jann elizabeth Love is so short, and forgetting so long. -Pablo Neruda |
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Sandra Cox Junior Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 48Essex, London,UK |
What a very sad but very beautiful poem written by someone who obviously loved someone very much but then lost them. Best Wishes Sandra |
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