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Dream_Cloud
Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 10
Daytona Beach, FL USA

0 posted 2000-03-25 09:53 PM



I once loved you below a pink moon
Underneath a sky so very blue
You once looked into my eyes, kissed my cheek
And said you loved me too

I once loved you under a sun of yellow fire
In the midst of roses and sunflowers
You once held my hand, kissed my lips
And talked with me for hours

I once loved you beside reflecting water
Lying in a field of grass so very green
It was easy to love you as you kissed my neck
In the middle of that beautiful scene

I now love you underneath an old roof
With children calling my name
The scene has changed, no longer so lovely
But I love you more, if not the same

-Dream_Cloud

© Copyright 2000 Lauren B. Morrison - All Rights Reserved
Bronx
Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 84
Oviedo, Florida, U.S.
1 posted 2000-03-25 10:09 PM


wow-
love the poem very very much.  I love the way it ends!
bye
Bronx


 Be careful!
It's a jungle out there!


CrEaTuRe
Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260
Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia
2 posted 2000-03-25 11:44 PM


A very lovely first post i must say   i like the way your poem follow the flow....it's very nice piece dear ......
by the way, Welcome to Passions Dream_Cloud  

Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
3 posted 2000-03-26 12:51 PM


Very nice first poem.  It tis so true how the scenery changes but the love remains unchanged.  Excellent story line for this poem.

Peace,
Dark_kisses_within


 I do not love you for being perfect.....
I love you for being perfect for me!!

~Venus~
Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128

4 posted 2000-03-26 08:56 AM


This was beautiful. And I like your user-name.

 ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~

I'll be here...why? I'll
be waiting...for what?
'll be waiting for you
so...if you come here,
you'll find me...

I promise.

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
5 posted 2000-03-26 07:43 PM


Welcome Dream Cloud!!  This is a beautiful poem showing life's change and love growing ever stronger.  Wonderful.  I really loved this..  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Sandra Cox
Junior Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 48
Essex, London,UK
6 posted 2000-03-26 07:45 PM


Great poem.  Well done!

Sandra

ShadowHeart
Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 49

7 posted 2000-03-26 08:01 PM


This was really a great poem...keep on writing!!

 Love is our greatest weakness
but when it's found,
it's our greatest strength.

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