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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
Black as death As I take my last breath Dark as night Erase death from my sight Feelings swirling in a black pool I never once was “cool” Just let death fall over me I once was free I am taken prisoner in death’s tight grip Messenger of fear in sight Dark deception kills the light ~Metallica~ |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
This is a very strong piece. Reading it is like getting punched between the eyes. Good job! Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night. -Edgar Allen Poe |
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mcclain Junior Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 13 |
Great dark poem! Maybe you can explore the reasons behind the feelings you develop in this piece and write another one which goes even deeper. Look forward to reading more... [This message has been edited by mcclain (edited 03-26-2000).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I wouldn't say that about you hon. You are in a really cool place often - Passions! Seriously.... Great work though  There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well, personally, I view "Death" as one come to free you from a prison, not imprison you. But I like the poem, nonetheless. Michael |
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