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Michael
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0 posted 2000-03-24 08:21 PM


NIGHT


Silence, darkness, emptiness, rain,
Thunder raging, a passing train.
The epitome of graceless dwelling
On a life most unfulfilling.

The lonely night, my only friend.
Forged in the darkness on the wind.
As passion plays in monotone,
Songs of silence, again, alone.

My heart it beats, however hollow.
Empty as thought from a mind so shallow.
Senseless as the touch that cannot feel
Come to these calloused hands of steel.

Emotion raining down a thousandfold,
A desire to be loved turning me cold.
In these storms of life, so unforgiving.
In this life I'm not sure that I'm living.

Michael Anderson
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 For all behind was dark and drear,
And all before was night and fear.
How many hours of night or day
In those suspended pangs I lay,
I could not tell; I scarcely knew
If this were human breath I drew.

Lord Byron




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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-24 10:18 PM


Emotion raining down a thousandfold,
A desire to be loved turning me cold.
In these storms of life, so unforgiving.
In this life I'm not sure that I'm living.

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Storms of black, dark of night...
these too bow down with the morning's light.
Pain numbed hands and hearts once again to feel...
in thy hand...thy poets pen shall heal.
jm


M, this is a perfect example of why you are the ruler of the dark...next to loneliness in the dictionary...this poem should be found...you have defined it with your usual grace.
I have no words to tell you how the last line effected me.
take care, jm


 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman


demonic~angel
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since 2000-03-11
Posts 54
Kansas
2 posted 2000-03-25 12:31 PM


Micheal~After reading this it brought tears to my eyes...So much loneliness in this dramatic poem...You are truly the ruler of Dark as JM has said...I so agree w/ her...Wonderful..Supreb...



 Messenger of fear in sight
Dark deception kills the light
~Metallica~

X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
Oregon
3 posted 2000-03-25 02:58 PM


Michael, you can never be lonely. You have too many friends. Your broken heart will heal and YOU will find the woman of your dreams (I've just turned psychic LOL).
Besides if all else fails there's still Rose Red *wink*
much love
~X~

Aiden Kelly
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 148
Ft. Wayne, IN USA
4 posted 2000-03-25 05:09 PM


so beautiful, so sad.  love comes...eventually.  waiting is the icky part.    beautiful imagery...makes my heart grow heavy as i read b/c i know what you are going through.  hope you find what you are looking for!    big hug for you!
dhuron
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since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

5 posted 2000-03-26 01:16 AM


Michael,

This Is a excellent, beyond excellent poem.
Darkness and lonliness...I could feel the emtion as I read.  The best I have read!

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-03-26 10:32 PM


"A desire to be loved turning me cold."  That is exactly how I have felt for over one year now.  A hard rain is gonna fall.   James
Michael
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Posts 7666
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7 posted 2000-03-27 02:35 AM


Janet - quite a compliment there.  Sincerest thanks to you.

demonic~angel, I'm so glad you liked the poem...but i never meant to make you cry...

X-Angel, well i must be doing something right to lure an Angel, (Even an X-Angel), down her to these realms of Darkness...

Aiden, waiting just plain sucks and I gave up searching long ago.  Not much left when you get to that point.

dhuron, Thank you...I'm glad you felt so strongly about this one.

jmlee12345, A hard Rain, indeed, James.  Don't let it drown you my friend.


Michael


AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
8 posted 2000-03-27 12:22 PM


Michael that was painfully beautuful...
it left me so numb...
take care
Avanti


 you don't have to understand completely..to love completely...
remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao



Sandra Cox
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since 2000-03-24
Posts 48
Essex, London,UK
9 posted 2000-03-28 02:13 PM


Stong emotion Micheal, I know where you're coming from though.  Does all life have to be a storm though?  I think the sum comes out eventually.

Best Wishes Sandra

ZuMBLe
Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 33

10 posted 2000-03-28 03:41 PM


Wow, that was VERY well written.  It made me feel every moment of your poem.  Took me through your night and reminded me of my own.  
Poetry is about capturing emotion, and you definately capture emotion and the moment in that poem.


Tess
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since 2000-03-22
Posts 288
Australia
11 posted 2000-03-29 10:13 AM


As passion plays in monotone,
Songs of silence, again, alone.

So much I would like to say about this poem,,but seems that others have said it far more eloquently ..l can only echo their praise...
A poem that shows the emptiness of life without love

 "Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time
that you've never had it before."
~author unknown~



SEA
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12 posted 2000-03-29 04:56 PM


Michael~ I am lacking in words to tell you how this touched my heart. Every single word...Excellent. -SEA
just_another_fe
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since 2000-02-05
Posts 483
MICHIGAN
13 posted 2000-03-30 10:49 PM


well there is nothing left for me to say they said it all lol good job again

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