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Janet Marie
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0 posted 2000-03-23 04:13 PM


~Perdition~

Suffer in silence
Drown in tears
Bleed out your eyes
Suffocate in fears

Dressed in Denial
Broken by rejection
Loss of  desire
Void of reflection

Die once, die twice
Screams cry in your ears
Haunted by the past
Damaged by the years

Curses of  fate
Mirrors shard and shattered
Eyes of lies
Bleeding, bruised and battered

Rage and anger
Secrets of shame
Pain of pleasure
Unrelenting blame

Bonded by blood
Severed by sorrow
Ties that bind
Sin to borrow

Dance with the devil
Call out his name
Look in his eyes
Burned by the flame

Ashes to ashes
Dust to dust
Alibis of lies
Lust of trust

Sacrifice of innocence
Pain to gain
Obsessive behavior
Ever a scarring stain

Evil in mind
Day and night
Shadows follow
Darkness and light

No longer a hostage
Break free, break way
Chains unlocked
Forever this price to pay

Janet Marie


** written for a friend 11/12/99

© Copyright 2000 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
kaile
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1 posted 2000-03-23 04:22 PM


i like this poem-though for this reader,though the beginning captivates my attention(i like the 2nd stanza-very powerful) but as it progresses on,this reader is just reading words and having little emotional response....

but i really like the inclusion of the devil here--devil's advocate,huh ")

PoeticKnight
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2 posted 2000-03-23 04:53 PM


one word....Awesome!
Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-03-23 05:26 PM


thanks my sweet jer, your awesome as well.
Kaile...thanks for the read, I know this ones a little cryptic...it was written that way by request of the person who its about...its one of those--"read between the lines" kind of poems...it speaks of a very specific subject in his life...the reason he felt he lived in "perdition"...IE "hell on earth"...anyway, maybe this footnote will help make the emotions of the poem more clear..sometimes it hard to know what the poet intended.
Thanks
take care, jm

Isis
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4 posted 2000-03-23 06:04 PM


You are a smart lady aren't you?  
We all have a little of our own hell on Earth, could relate in ways..
As always, well done hon!!  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Broken Wings
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5 posted 2000-03-23 06:52 PM


WONDERFUL!...hell, ahhh... a all too familiar place.

take care,
Broken Wings
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 "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth."      
-IYANLA VANZANT




[This message has been edited by Broken Wings (edited 03-23-2000).]

StarrGazer
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6 posted 2000-03-23 08:21 PM


WOW Janet good job !!! Don't know what else to say  this was powerful and great!!!

 "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning"
~Randal Jarrell~



dhuron
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7 posted 2000-03-23 10:09 PM


A great..GREAT...piece

So many of my emotions I feel within this piece...

I am overwhelmed...which does not happen often....

Great Work!

Jannel
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Muncie, IN, USA
8 posted 2000-03-23 11:39 PM


this was incredible. i so loved the ashes to ashes stanza, as well as the whole thing. just wow.
jannel


 Dont wake the dead,
Wake the dying,
Don't change what you've said,
Change what you're saying.

Tess
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9 posted 2000-03-24 02:13 AM


Alibis of lies
Lust of trust

these were the lines that stuck in my mind...deception and all that goes with it

a poem to make me think..l like the cryptic stuff where all is not straightforward!!


 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle


Janet Marie
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10 posted 2000-03-25 02:32 PM


thanks to ALL for the compliments and kind words....most of all for reading...

Isis, i been called alot of things...smart aint one of them...LOL..or did you mean smart-mouth..now that one...  oh yes...

Starr, Broken Wings, Jannel and Tess,
thanks for the wows and enthusiastic replies...

dhuron...thank you for being so effected by my words and letting me know so kindly.

thanks guys...
take care, jm

 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman


Aiden Kelly
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11 posted 2000-03-25 05:42 PM


ok...as always...WOW!  you've done it again!    gotta agree with broken wings on this one...hell is an all too familiar place!  i think the cryptic-ness of it is what makes it so powerful -- harsher and more haunting!
********
Curses of  fate
Mirrors shard and shattered
Eyes of lies
Bleeding, bruised and battered
********
couldn't really explain why, but this is my favorite stanza.  it affects me...like it's reminding me of something, part of my past...like unable to control my life, feeling like my world is shattered, i can see the lying eyes in my mind, the last part is the way my heart and soul feel after my life falls apart...deep, thought provoking...and, of course, loved it!  


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12 posted 2005-04-24 01:14 AM


Bonded by blood
Severed by sorrow
Ties that bind
Sin to borrow

Dance with the devil
Call out his name
Look in his eyes
Burned by the flame

Ashes to ashes
Dust to dust
Alibis of lies
Lust of trust

Good grief, this one sure hits the target of how it feels!

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