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~Perdition~

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 03-23-2000 04:13 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

~Perdition~

Suffer in silence
Drown in tears
Bleed out your eyes
Suffocate in fears

Dressed in Denial
Broken by rejection
Loss of  desire
Void of reflection

Die once, die twice
Screams cry in your ears
Haunted by the past
Damaged by the years

Curses of  fate
Mirrors shard and shattered
Eyes of lies
Bleeding, bruised and battered

Rage and anger
Secrets of shame
Pain of pleasure
Unrelenting blame

Bonded by blood
Severed by sorrow
Ties that bind
Sin to borrow

Dance with the devil
Call out his name
Look in his eyes
Burned by the flame

Ashes to ashes
Dust to dust
Alibis of lies
Lust of trust

Sacrifice of innocence
Pain to gain
Obsessive behavior
Ever a scarring stain

Evil in mind
Day and night
Shadows follow
Darkness and light

No longer a hostage
Break free, break way
Chains unlocked
Forever this price to pay

Janet Marie


** written for a friend 11/12/99
© Copyright 2000 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
kaile
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1 posted 03-23-2000 04:22 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

i like this poem-though for this reader,though the beginning captivates my attention(i like the 2nd stanza-very powerful) but as it progresses on,this reader is just reading words and having little emotional response....

but i really like the inclusion of the devil here--devil's advocate,huh ")
PoeticKnight
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2 posted 03-23-2000 04:53 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

one word....Awesome!
Janet Marie
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3 posted 03-23-2000 05:26 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

thanks my sweet jer, your awesome as well.
Kaile...thanks for the read, I know this ones a little cryptic...it was written that way by request of the person who its about...its one of those--"read between the lines" kind of poems...it speaks of a very specific subject in his life...the reason he felt he lived in "perdition"...IE "hell on earth"...anyway, maybe this footnote will help make the emotions of the poem more clear..sometimes it hard to know what the poet intended.
Thanks
take care, jm
Isis
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4 posted 03-23-2000 06:04 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

You are a smart lady aren't you?  
We all have a little of our own hell on Earth, could relate in ways..
As always, well done hon!!  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


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5 posted 03-23-2000 06:52 PM       View Profile for Broken Wings   Email Broken Wings   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Broken Wings

WONDERFUL!...hell, ahhh... a all too familiar place.

take care,
Broken Wings


 "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth."      
-IYANLA VANZANT




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StarrGazer
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6 posted 03-23-2000 08:21 PM       View Profile for StarrGazer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for StarrGazer

WOW Janet good job !!! Don't know what else to say  this was powerful and great!!!

 "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning"
~Randal Jarrell~


dhuron
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7 posted 03-23-2000 10:09 PM       View Profile for dhuron   Email dhuron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit dhuron's Home Page   View IP for dhuron

A great..GREAT...piece

So many of my emotions I feel within this piece...

I am overwhelmed...which does not happen often....

Great Work!
Jannel
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8 posted 03-23-2000 11:39 PM       View Profile for Jannel   Email Jannel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jannel

this was incredible. i so loved the ashes to ashes stanza, as well as the whole thing. just wow.
jannel


 Dont wake the dead,
Wake the dying,
Don't change what you've said,
Change what you're saying.
Tess
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9 posted 03-24-2000 02:13 AM       View Profile for Tess   Email Tess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tess's Home Page   View IP for Tess

Alibis of lies
Lust of trust

these were the lines that stuck in my mind...deception and all that goes with it

a poem to make me think..l like the cryptic stuff where all is not straightforward!!


 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle

Janet Marie
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10 posted 03-25-2000 02:32 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

thanks to ALL for the compliments and kind words....most of all for reading...

Isis, i been called alot of things...smart aint one of them...LOL..or did you mean smart-mouth..now that one...  oh yes...

Starr, Broken Wings, Jannel and Tess,
thanks for the wows and enthusiastic replies...

dhuron...thank you for being so effected by my words and letting me know so kindly.

thanks guys...
take care, jm

 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman

Aiden Kelly
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11 posted 03-25-2000 05:42 PM       View Profile for Aiden Kelly   Email Aiden Kelly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aiden Kelly

ok...as always...WOW!  you've done it again!    gotta agree with broken wings on this one...hell is an all too familiar place!  i think the cryptic-ness of it is what makes it so powerful -- harsher and more haunting!
********
Curses of  fate
Mirrors shard and shattered
Eyes of lies
Bleeding, bruised and battered
********
couldn't really explain why, but this is my favorite stanza.  it affects me...like it's reminding me of something, part of my past...like unable to control my life, feeling like my world is shattered, i can see the lying eyes in my mind, the last part is the way my heart and soul feel after my life falls apart...deep, thought provoking...and, of course, loved it!  

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12 posted 04-24-2005 01:14 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Bonded by blood
Severed by sorrow
Ties that bind
Sin to borrow

Dance with the devil
Call out his name
Look in his eyes
Burned by the flame

Ashes to ashes
Dust to dust
Alibis of lies
Lust of trust

Good grief, this one sure hits the target of how it feels!
 
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