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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas 
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Do you curse the day you were born your soul tattered and torn hate the very date as if it somehow sealed your fate? Do you look upon life with hatred- disdain some how blaming it for all of your pain? Do you lay in bed at night sobbing into your pillow Not wanting to hold on but unable to let go? Do you scream in silent agony that life is so unfair and try to convince yourself that you no longer care? Do you lay in the darkness unable to see the light and wonder if things will ever once again be right? Do you think you're strong when you are weak because your pride refuses to let you speak? Do you have things in your heart you're needing to say but ignore those things brush them away? Do you realize it's okay to grab a helping hand that there is someone out there who's sure to understand? Do you know the weak become strong when they chose to fight against the darkness closing in and the dying of the light? Do you know these things yet chose to disreguard given up on trying trying's just too hard? Do you want to be like me one who no longer tries who has only herself to blame for the teardrops from her eyes? "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
it's a nice piece StarrGazer full of emotions  sometimes i too feel the same .....you are not a lone dear  i'm here for you all the time and to wipe away those tears too ..... mail me if you want ....i'm there for you...CrEaTuRe |
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Sparks Junior Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 11Sandy Lake, Pa |
very good work Starr. This poem speaks to me because at one point or another in my life I've felt the way you do in this post. keep up the excellent work. I look forward to seeing more of it. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
very emotional piece...we all do at one time or another...hopefully our writing answers all our questions. take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
i thought this poem was interesting..you started in a negative way then talked of helping hands so I thought it would end on a positive note...but then it swung back again to a sad and lonely ending. I think we all feel this way sometimes...and if your writing helps you then great..but you are never alone....remember there are people all around who will listen and care Take care Tess "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two bodies." -Aristotle |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Creature thanks for the comments and the offer Sparks thanks Janet Marie thanks amazing how writing can fix things eh Tess I was trying to capture the feelings we have when asking ourselves questions in depressions state how our mood sometimes swings to hope then way back down again didnt do too good of a job on it but thanks "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
Once again Starr you speak to me...Its like we are sisters that are far away from each other that have a strong bond in the same feelings we endure...Your words always speak to me....*huggz* Messenger of fear in sight Dark deception kills the light ~Metallica~ |
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