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The Jackal
Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2000-03-20 02:25 AM


where did you get those empty eyes
i have to know
so i can get a pair of my own
and what do you do with broken lies
im curious..curious to the bone
some say the god you own
is the god you give
show me the lesson here
there IS more to life than just fear.....
for me the need is always just to disappear...

© Copyright 2000 John Dixon - All Rights Reserved
StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
1 posted 2000-03-20 07:35 AM


Jackal good job can relate  to the  questions asked her and  the need or want to dissapear  

 "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning"
~Randal Jarrell~



Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-03-20 09:20 AM


where did you get those empty eyes
i have to know
so i can get a pair of my own
and what do you do with broken lies
im curious..curious to the bone
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jac, this poem is AWESOME...man, it hit me from the first line...you nailed this one...
i relate to this in a major way.
its perfect.
take care, jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman



Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-03-20 11:35 PM


Questions we may never really get the answer to!!!   Some people suffer from religious hypocrisy, and for sure the answers aren't with them.  Say one thing, always doing another.  
Interesting thoughts and questions, too much for my brain at this time of day!!!  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
4 posted 2000-03-21 12:11 PM


nice, every word was just right. and an incredible opening, i must say. great work.
jannel

 Dont wake the dead,
Wake the dying,
Don't change what you've said,
Change what you're saying.

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