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Broken Wings
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since 2000-03-18
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Miami, FL.

0 posted 2000-03-19 05:29 PM


Walls

It starts at the ground and reaches the stars

And yet, my emotions overflow.

When I start to drown, I tear them down

I’m exposed to the world

Letting all my pain and tears show.

Crying out in the darkness for salvation

Looking for sanity in the light.

A hand reaches out to me

But like a rose, I too have thorns.

Tender words are said

Tears are shed.

Looking at the future

Chained to the past.

Pulled back to my space

Picking up the pieces on the way

Once again I’m feeling safe.





[This message has been edited by Broken Wings (edited 03-19-2000).]

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Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
1 posted 2000-03-19 07:46 PM


~B.W.

This was very well written, and in a way mirrors some of the pain I have experienced in life. This poem captures your feelings quite wonderfully!

Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-03-19 10:02 PM


Looking at the future

Chained to the past.

Pulled back to my space

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this is VERY good...and well written...love the use of the wall metaphor...
great job, I relate to these feeling well,
take care, jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman



Aiden Kelly
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 148
Ft. Wayne, IN USA
3 posted 2000-03-20 04:25 PM


A hand reaches out to me

But like a rose, I too have thorns.
******
i love the picture i get b/c it's such and accurate picture of how i feel about me...there may be something beautiful in me but the thorns are there as well...beautifully done!  great work!!!  

Broken Wings
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since 2000-03-18
Posts 157
Miami, FL.
4 posted 2000-03-20 05:01 PM


Thank you very much for your comments..It's nice to know that i can do something right.

take care,
Broken Wings  


 "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth."
-IYANLA VANZANT


Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
5 posted 2000-03-21 11:43 PM


Your poem touched me and as I started to put into words what I thought I read your reply..."it's nice to know I can do something right"....That was such a painful and familiar statement...You will fly again Broken Wings...because anyone with "wings" as beautiful as yours is meant to fly...and fly HIGH!!
*Angel Wing Hugs...because they are  unconditional**

Broken Wings
Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157
Miami, FL.
6 posted 2000-03-22 12:18 PM


Butterfly~ Thank you for your kind words and huggs....sometimes it's very hard to see the good things one does and posting my poems here and seeing the replies, even if it's only one reply, clears my skies even if it's only for a little while.

take care


 "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth."
-IYANLA VANZANT



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