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kaile
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0 posted 2000-03-19 04:36 AM


Pitch Black(a dark haiku)

Hunted prey cornered
Cold hard barrel with warn tears
My finger squeezes


© Copyright 2000 heng kaile - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-03-19 09:46 AM


kaile came to the dark to play  
this is very good...I cant write haiku...im too long winded  lol...you made it look easy.
take care, jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman



JOY 14
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2 posted 2000-03-19 11:21 AM


Welcome to Dark Passions Kaile.  I too think you made this look easy.  Not easy for me, haiku, I've tried.  

Joy

Lone Wolf
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3 posted 2000-03-19 09:57 PM


Welcome to the dark, Kaile.  I've always liked haiku.  Now I look at in a whole new way.  Never thought of it as dark before...thanks.  Good job.  

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Isis
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4 posted 2000-03-19 11:03 PM


Welcome to the dark forum.  Haiku is somewhat daunting to me, if you keep posting here I may summon the courage to try one.
Welcome!!  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


Aiden Kelly
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5 posted 2000-03-20 04:05 PM


i love this!!! very dark, so simple yet.... what an impact a few words can make...that's why i love japanese poetry! great work!  WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!  
kaile
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6 posted 2000-03-23 01:15 PM


thank you all for liking this ")
Mon Cherie
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7 posted 2001-10-31 10:52 PM


Wow. Your first poem is already pretty impressive.

Uh... guess i'm juz like the rest who think Haikus are juz awesome pieces of poetry, which I can't write, coz like Janet Marie says, too long winded. =P

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