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You Don't Always Hear Voices
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You Don't Always Hear Voices |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon 
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You Don’t Always Hear Voices Sitting in the dim light with eyes focused on the glowing coal between my fingers Watching the blue/gray cigarette smoke as it floats upwards toward the ceiling Twisting and curling as if in silent agony My head aches from the nicotine overdose But I gratefully accept the throbbing pain as it reminds me that I am still capable of feeling something different The confusion that often overwhelms me now lies dormant in the back of my mind Waiting for me to weaken and fall so that it can ravage my mind and soul But right now, I am the stronger My spirit somehow bouyed by the pressure of the wall pressed against my back Hot sweat boils from every pore becoming icy cold as it runs down my face as I strain to keep the confusion at bay Ignoring the cramps in my crossed legs I force myself to remain still, controlled Knowing that if I relax for one moment I will be consumed by the monster inside But it won’t happen tonight, not tonight I am the stronger, I am in control as I sit here in the darkened corner gently pounding the back of my head against the cold and unyielding wall © 12/99 Gary Pence < !signature--> Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night. -Edgar Allen Poe [This message has been edited by Jonas (edited 03-18-2000).] |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Ahhhhhhhhhh Gary  I remember this one (as you well know!!) Enjoyed it the first time I read it and still do!!!!!!!!! (I am NOT BIASED!!) ; ) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
This is wonderful, such vivid descriptions of your fight!! Bravo  May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
you have created one heck of an image. i enjoyed the read very much. kinda suspensful, my favorite kind! well done. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is EXCELLENT!! the aching imagery was perfect and the irony of the title is as well... very well written. take care, jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
Wow...this is so well translated into words!! Leaves me speechless... "Sheltered from the world you scare yourself from the rain...away from the dark sickning fog that so stumblest unto your heart...for no true poet holds loves hand..."-TanAngel |
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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
 Very good indeed...You have great courage in order to fight the voices...I on the other handcan't win the battle.. Messenger of fear in sight Dark deception kills the light ~Metallica~ |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
Thank you everyone! But remember, this is only fantasy. I just enjoy allowing my dark side come out once in awhile. Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night. -Edgar Allen Poe |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
you write so well! i like this. i can't explain why but a part of me feels as if i can relate. does that sound nuts? anyway, i really like it. (as a side note, the whole cigarette thing reminds me of a poem i read in french once called le petit dejeuner, ever heard of it?) good work!!! |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
"Sitting in the dim light with eyes focused on the glowing coal between my fingers" Great lines throughout! I also loved the imagery you created. Joy |
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