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Storm of My Soul |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas 
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Lightning flashes, pulsing like a strobe light Thunder crashes and roars in the silence of the night The wind howls furiously throwing things at the windowpane As I sit in anticipation, waiting for the rain It's cold wet drops begin to land upon my skin Relesing feelings I have hidden deep within I can feel the electric charge in the air Pumping through my veins, leaving my soul bare Nature's fury unleashed ravishing the land As I release pent up rage... still trying to understand Now warm salty tears mingle with the rain I just want to forget, to wash away the pain The rain whipping, stinging, tearing at my flesh As the storm and I become one, somehow intermesh The thunder booms in a voice I recognize as my own The wind shrieks in agony- all the pain I've known The Earth begs for mercy, it knows it will not win But I'm tired of paying, paying for someone else's sin A tornado of emotions destroying everything in its path Limbs break, windows shatter in the fury of my wrath My anger spent I suddenly grow weak The wind becomes a whisper, then no more does it speak I look up and see the sun appear from behind a cloud And I step into the light away from darkness' shroud ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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~Venus~ Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128 |
I liked this... ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~ I'll be here...why? I'll be waiting...for what? 'll be waiting for you so...if you come here, you'll find me... I promise. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Well written. This is poetry! |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
wow this is definitely poetry. this was amazing, the comparison of your fury to a storm that was outside your window. absolutekly amazing, i applaud this piece. bravo!! aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Thanks you guyz  shall I say my mood has been a bit stormy and kind of matched the weather ... but alas still waiting for the sun ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Starr~ I love this poem! I really love the rain and all the emotions it brings to me. I felt every word in this poem.  -SEA |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Starr WOW! I felt this poem with every single fiber in my being. I too have felt this very way. This was so amazingly powerful, and left me feeling in awe. AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
BRAVO!! Incredible imagery and emotion throughout. This IS definately poetry and a wonderful read! Kim |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Kim echoes my every thought on this! This is truly wonderful and you should be damned proud of it!!  May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Starr. this was awesome..the rhyme..the imagery...the emotional metaphors... and the pace of how it read... excellent. jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
SEA, Amy KimW, Isis, Janet Marie -Thank you all very much ... Big Smiles! ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SG, I liked this one a lot. Glad to see you finally are beginning to see the light. Great rhyme. LW |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
StarrGazer. . . The rain does have an effect on all of us, doesn't it? I have seen that it has been a point of reference for all of us lately. . . perhaps a rain challenge is in order? Isis, what do you think? Nothing like the storm, except of course, the sun. . . ----------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
Starr - this piece is absolutely amazing! Your imagery is so vivid I couuld hear the thunder. *Jonas Applauds*!!!!! Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night. -Edgar Allen Poe |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
wow, wow, wow!!!!! that's an awesome poem! storms are such a wonderful way to open up the emotions inside b/c the storms both inside and out become one! you've captured those emotions so well and with such imagery and the words...!!!! ******** The rain whipping, stinging, tearing at my flesh As the storm and I become one, somehow intermesh The thunder booms in a voice I recognize as my own The wind shrieks in agony- all the pain I've known The Earth begs for mercy, it knows it will not win But I'm tired of paying, paying for someone else's sin A tornado of emotions destroying everything in its path Limbs break, windows shatter in the fury of my wrath ************* again...WOW!!!!! |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Lone Wolf- thanks can never give up hope always have to wait for the sun to break out from behind the clouds Sven- yes it does I've always loved storms and ... I suppose hopefully I did the beauty and magnitism of a storm some justice hereJonas - thanks Aiden Kelly - thanks once again you're too kind !!! **Thank you all I'm glad you like it I think this is the favorite out of all the poems I've written so far ... "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is very intense. A pleasure to read. James |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Thanks James, glad you liked it ! "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
great use of weather to convey emotion. i liked this one a lot. jannel Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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