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PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
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0 posted 2000-03-15 02:09 PM


Many pieces of my fractured self
Lie like leaves upon the ground
And though I place my dreams on the shelf
My hopes still keep hanging around
It feels too real to realize
That life has passed before my eyes

The stifling, remorseless grip of life
And the timeless mental test
Only the sky which has no height
Or what used to be my best
It took a lifetime of resistance to see
My best, again, will never be



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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-15 02:12 PM


"The stifling, remorseless grip of life
And the timeless mental test
Only the sky which has no height
Or what used to be my best
It took a lifetime of resistance to see
My best, again, will never be"...

well, I have to disagree...
you best looks just fine to me  
and the best is yet to come...(smile)
oh and the poem is awesome too...
stalking you always,
your jm

ill_tactics
Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149

2 posted 2000-03-15 04:02 PM


i've placed so many dreams into tupperware also....hahaha  My hopes are alwayz lingering, no way to get rid of them.  Dont worry, your best is yet to come, even tho' you dont see it, or feel it, it'll be there.  Nice work as alwayz, Much love, One love, PEACE
SEA
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3 posted 2000-03-16 01:15 AM


JML~"And though I place my dreams on the shelf My hopes still keep hanging around" Wow, I sure have been there. Great poem! -SEA
danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
4 posted 2000-03-18 09:57 AM


i could relate all too well. wonderful work!
Aiden Kelly
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 148
Ft. Wayne, IN USA
5 posted 2000-03-18 11:51 PM


it does seem like whe you fall apart once there is no going back...and there isn't but moving forward seems to make us into even better people for we grow through our experiences!  well written!  your words spoke directly to me and took me back to the shadows of my past...the future is a much better place!

'The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.'
                      ~Eleanor Roosevelt

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