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Mai Ling
Junior Member
since 2000-03-15
Posts 15


0 posted 2000-03-15 04:36 AM


Time has come between us,
parting off from our jagged embrace

Silken linings of pinks, blues and grays
has reminisced
leaving us in yesterday's phase

We go on and on, telling fervent lies
hoping to succumb, out of the realities of life

Yet when the night is dead, and the moon is gone
slowly our vision fades, like phantoms in the dark



© Copyright 2000 Mai Ling - All Rights Reserved
CrEaTuRe
Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260
Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia
1 posted 2000-03-15 08:18 AM


welcome to passion  
full of emotions and it's a great the  way you expressed yourself   well done

a-alibaster
Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

2 posted 2000-03-15 09:15 AM


Welcome, welcome, to the place of many with words that scream to the world....welcome to passions!
So much emotion is such a few lines....wonderful!


 There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul...
a-alibaster

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-03-15 11:07 AM


Hi, welcome to passions..
this is very well written and expressed,
very well thought out,
nice to have you here with us.
take care, jm

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne



StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
4 posted 2000-03-15 12:21 PM


Welcome to passions   nicely expresssed piece !! Look forward to reading more

 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~



ill_tactics
Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149

5 posted 2000-03-15 12:49 PM


W....O....W!  I liked this poem very much, nice job.  Very well written, and i'm sure well thought out.  Much love, One love, pEACE
TanAngel
Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168
Oviedo, Florida, USA
6 posted 2000-03-15 12:55 PM


Welcome to Dark Passions or as I call it DP...This is so well expressed I hope to see more of your work soon

 "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel

Aiden Kelly
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148
Ft. Wayne, IN USA
7 posted 2000-03-15 03:49 PM


welcome!!  )  i like how this poem looks so simple yet has such a deep meaning.  you have a lovely style.  i look forward to reading more of your poetry!  welcome!  )
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
8 posted 2000-03-15 05:43 PM


Mai Ling welcome to Passions and the dark forum.  I loved your first post, good descriptions and visuals.  I like your style, awaiting more soon.  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
9 posted 2000-03-15 09:18 PM


"slowly our vision fades, like phantoms in the dark"
I like this ending, compliments the whole poem, which I really like as well!
I look forward to more.  Welcome.  

Joy

SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
10 posted 2000-03-15 10:11 PM


Mai Ling~ WELCOME! This is so pretty. Very emotional. Wonderful! -SEA
demonic~angel
Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54
Kansas
11 posted 2000-03-15 10:16 PM


Glad to have you here...*huggz* welcome to passions...wonderfully written...you express your emotions and feelings very beautifully...

take care

 Carpe Diem...

Mai Ling
Junior Member
since 2000-03-15
Posts 15

12 posted 2000-03-16 05:39 AM


Dear Guys,

Thank you all so much for welcoming me here in your family of poets. Rest assured, you'll be seeing a lot of my works from then on..

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
13 posted 2000-03-16 07:40 AM


This poem is enchanting and exotic...enjoyed reading this.   James
~Venus~
Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128

14 posted 2000-03-16 07:59 PM


Nice...hope to see more of you...

 ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~

I'll be here...why? I'll
be waiting...for what?
'll be waiting for you
so...if you come here,
you'll find me...

I promise.

devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
15 posted 2000-03-17 12:58 PM


great first post.  welcome, and i look forward to more posts from you.

aimee


 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
16 posted 2000-03-17 04:12 PM


This is beautiful Mai Ling...so much expression and meaning...

Welcome to Dark Passions...I hope you come to love it as much as we do...

              Yours truly,
                 Angel


 "The dark weight of the hour
humming madly
filling my head
with blood
and sorrow
and dread
the executioner's song."
-Jewel
"The Dark Bells"

~*Angel of Darkness*~



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