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~Eyes That Cant See~

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 03-14-2000 05:01 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

~Eyes That Cant See~


If I was blind ... the way you seem to be...
then I would be spared--seeing all that's dying right in front of me.
Were there any witnesses ... were you notified...
did you even mourn -- when all my hope and desire died.
Your so oblivious...there are so many women living here inside of me.
Would you even realize...if I were to set any of them free.
Is it delusion that blinds ... every night lying here next to a stranger.
Somebody should explain...warn you of denials danger.
You wont give thanks--but you'll sure ask for favors.
When did love become a chore, when did it become such a labor.
Is there such a thing...as an innocent infidelity,
its only a distracting illusion...to comfort this dying reality.
What will it take for you to see--if I was bleeding out my eyes...
would you then understand...would you then hear my cries.

I wish I was blind...
the way that you seem to be,
Then I wouldn't have to watch...this love dying deep inside of me.

Janet Marie


 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne


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PoeticKnight
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1 posted 03-14-2000 05:34 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

This poem ached my heart....and haunted me. That is a mark of a good poem huh?
Smile.

JML
Isis
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2 posted 03-14-2000 05:35 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Sad one Janet Marie.  But if you WERE blind, you other senses would take over and you would feel and touch the love dying inside.  There is no cure for that feeling alas...
Beautifully and sensitivly written  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)

StarrGazer
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3 posted 03-14-2000 06:43 PM       View Profile for StarrGazer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for StarrGazer

This was very good Janet been there felt that  same feeling  felt love slipping through my fingers and  powerless to stop it  could only watch it go and I wished I didnt have to see also ... Great job  

 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~


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4 posted 03-14-2000 09:22 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Excellent Janet... but sooner or later, we all open our eyes .. .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

atslanta
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5 posted 03-14-2000 10:03 PM       View Profile for atslanta   Email atslanta   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for atslanta

Wonderful Janet, this was very heartfelt and I agree, if blindness overtook you, you would still be sensual to the heart and always faithful to it.  Thanks.

                       A
Mai Ling
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6 posted 03-15-2000 04:22 AM       View Profile for Mai Ling   Email Mai Ling   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mai Ling

A haunting tale of betrayal Janet. Painfully wonderful, great work!
CrEaTuRe
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7 posted 03-15-2000 06:31 AM       View Profile for CrEaTuRe   Email CrEaTuRe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CrEaTuRe

it's sad but it happens to all of us sometimes you can see it but choose to be blind by it  co'z when we are  in love nothing else can be seen .....great one dear  
Aiden Kelly
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8 posted 03-15-2000 04:20 PM       View Profile for Aiden Kelly   Email Aiden Kelly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aiden Kelly

two words for you...WOW! & this is absolutely haunting!  it simply floors me...as always!  )
ill_tactics
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9 posted 03-15-2000 04:49 PM       View Profile for ill_tactics   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ill_tactics

I feel your words, they hurt yet they heal.  This dying heart of mine, they alwayz reveal.  Great poetry as alwayz.  Much love, One love PEACE


~~~love to those who love me, and peace to those who deem it necessary~~~
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10 posted 03-15-2000 05:43 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Janet this is superb.  much applause.
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11 posted 03-15-2000 10:34 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Janet~ this is so powerful. Another awesome poem! -SEA
Danny Holloway
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12 posted 03-16-2000 11:09 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

"dying reality".  
Unique and interesting. Strong feelings within for sure.
Nice work.
JamesMichael
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13 posted 03-16-2000 04:27 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

"If I was blind..the way you seem to be"..Janet that line says so much..I have felt this feeling so many times and I know that I have put other people thru this hell.  I hope for the best for you, hon.  James
Artur Hawkwing
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14 posted 03-16-2000 06:45 PM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

Sad,.... people who are blind to love don't understand love very well. My English teacher once said that if everyone showed their feelings on the outside, everyone would be in tears. But I think children are different. Reach out to the ones who aren't blind. : ) This was done differently and with originality... thank you for sharing.
Lost Dreamer
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15 posted 03-16-2000 06:56 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

This is amazing in the depth of emotion you express. Superb writing.
Wikket
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16 posted 03-16-2000 08:03 PM       View Profile for Wikket   Email Wikket   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wikket

Janet Marie,
Are we Soul Sisters or what?  These words evoke such emotion inside me, I can't help but admit to feeling them before.  You know your great at displaying your emotions?! I hope I can learn something from you!  --Jamie    
serenity blaze
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17 posted 06-15-2004 05:59 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

watch my heart break with this one--it's how I knew we were twins.

Sunshine
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18 posted 06-15-2004 09:05 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


See?  Sun doesn't catch all of 'em...but later is better'n sooner sometimes...that way, I can measure the growth...
 
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