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Sven
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0 posted 2000-03-13 01:02 AM


Do you recognize this?
It's my heart
I know why you might not,
This is how it looked when we started.

Yes, it did used to look like this
Beating fully with passion and life
Seemingly lost in love's wonderful bliss
Having lived through life's little strifes

But then one day, my heart stopped
Arrested by your controlling, paranoid ways
To me, it was like a bomb had been dropped
It's a wonder that I even stayed

But stay I did, as I got used to living without a heart
As you molded me a new one, of your own vision
When you transplanted it, my body rejected it with a start
And quickly closed up the invading incision.

Slowly, my body began to repair the damage done
My strength began to return, my mind became clear
This heart was stronger, bolder than the old one
It gave me purpose of mind, and chased away the fear.

My new heart and I will not be destroyed
We've suffered at you hands for far too long
No longer will you pull my strings, with my feelings you will not toy.
For now, I have my heart and my voice, and with them I will sing a new song.

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


© Copyright 2000 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
StarrGazer
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1 posted 2000-03-13 08:42 AM


very good poem Sven and so true if love is conditional it only does us harm better to seek true love elsewhere though it is very hard to just give up on a dream sometimes they were meant just to be dreams

 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~



PoeticKnight
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2 posted 2000-03-13 10:44 AM


A real strong, emotional poem Sven. Good feelings of what happens to your heart in romance.
Sven
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3 posted 2000-03-13 01:16 PM


Thank you my friends. . . your words mean a lot to me. . .

JML, I knew that you would understand. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Janet Marie
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4 posted 2000-03-13 04:33 PM


ah yes...the search for unconditional love...
emotional poem of strength Sven.
jm

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne



Dark Enchantress
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5 posted 2000-03-13 05:01 PM


This was absolutely wonderful Sven...I love the way this was written...especially with showing the rise after the fall.
            
              Yours truly,
                 Angel


 "The dark weight of the hour
humming madly
filling my head
with blood
and sorrow
and dread
the executioner's song."
-Jewel
"The Dark Bells"

~*Angel of Darkness*~


Isis
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6 posted 2000-03-13 05:29 PM


And singing you are Sven, strong and beautifully.  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


SEA
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with you
7 posted 2000-03-13 10:30 PM


Sven~ ((jumping up and down~ in a cheer for you))YAAAAAAAA!!! I LOVE this! This is how I felt after leaving my ex-husband! Very well said! -SEA
Sven
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8 posted 2000-03-13 10:54 PM


Thank you all. . .

Janet--My search does indeed continue. . .any suggestions?

DE--thank you, indeed my rise does continue

Isis--my song is indeed loud and clear again. . . thank you. . .

SEA--would you like to be my cheering section?

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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