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demonic~angel
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since 2000-03-11
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Kansas

0 posted 2000-03-12 02:49 PM


Deep inside me
Lays my feelings
Twisting, turning
Forever burning

Never going to ashes
Black heart scarring still
Never seeing daylight
Always in darkness

© Copyright 2000 Misty Hawley - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-12 02:52 PM


very powerful emotions expressed here in so few words...deep and dark...nice work.
jm

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne



JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
2 posted 2000-03-12 07:05 PM


"Deep inside me
Lays my feelings
Twisting, turning,
Forever burning"

Like your style-- a lot!  

Joy

 Gather ye rosebuds while ye may,
Old time is still a-flying,
And this same flower that smiles today
To-morrow will be dying.

-Robert Herrick



ill_tactics
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 149

3 posted 2000-03-13 04:55 PM


this is a really nice poem.  Straight to the point, with no hesitation in what you want to say.  Life should be like that, but tends to play with you like a kitten with a ball of yarn.  Keep it up.  Much love, One love, PEACE
Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
4 posted 2000-03-13 05:07 PM


Wonderful...you expressed such strong emotion in so very little words...a song I've heard before...played again so very, very well..
               Yours truly,
                  Angel


 "The dark weight of the hour
humming madly
filling my head
with blood
and sorrow
and dread
the executioner's song."
-Jewel
"The Dark Bells"

~*Angel of Darkness*~


SEA
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5 posted 2000-03-13 10:20 PM


DA~ I'm sending you some ice This was great! -SEA
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6 posted 2000-03-13 10:58 PM


Excellent DA. . . you seem to have the gift of saying a lot in a little space. . . well done. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
7 posted 2000-03-14 12:32 PM


wondergul use of a few words.
jannel

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