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Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

0 posted 2000-03-12 08:48 AM

Metaphor

hungry
        and alone
working in mire
existing

fed well
      yet a gnaw
in my stomach

gifted with foresight
of a solitude
I can never leave

I am wolf
  without pack

night-tripping
      through the eyes
of trees
and the benevolence
of a moon
whose light
         will never warm

created
to live the life
of a dark world
        walking wild

an inner reflection
of blood I’ve swallowed
chases my thought

survival

there I pace
unthriving

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-12 01:55 PM

night-tripping
through the eyes
of trees
and the benevolence
of a moon
whose light
will never warm

wow Sev, this is deep, so full of emotional imagery..very well written out from your inner thoughts. good work. take care, jm

Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 2000-03-12 04:08 PM

Sweet Butterfly... you never cease to amaze me with your great talent. This is absolutley
beautiful.. so vivid, so real.

Well Done Soul-Sis.

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

Seaangel
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand

3 posted 2000-03-13 08:58 PM

makes me think of witches, moonlit rambles and deep dark wildness....things to be appreciated too!!

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 2000-03-13 09:53 PM

Why do I have this sudden urge to wear a crucifix and sharpen a stake?

Goosebumps abound here, Kamla

Artur Hawkwing
Member

since 1999-06-30

Posts 444
USA

5 posted 2000-03-14 06:08 PM

Severn-

It wouldn't be right of me to ignore one of your works posted in the Dark Forums, since that's something I don't see often. This is not for the lighthearted to read...

created
to live the life
of a dark world
walking wild

Those words snap together well.

Take care,
Artur Hawkwing

-----
Cogitationis poenam nemo patitur. <i>Latin for:</i> Nobody should be punished for his thoughts.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

6 posted 2000-03-14 08:32 PM

Severn glad you dropped in!! Loved to see this side of you

Should I call the slayer???

May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2000-03-14 08:57 PM

Severn--this is stunning--love the gothic feel of this--only a 'loner' could understand this...Thanks for the insight.

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