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The Enemy.....a villanelle

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Balladeer
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0 posted 03-11-2000 11:32 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


I see him calmly standing there
So confident and void of fear
Mocking me with icy stare.

Unable to escape his stare
Of confidence combined with leer
I see him calmly standing there.

Sarcastic monster! How he dare
To criticize my weak veneer
Mocking me with icy stare.

Remindful of an old nightmare
Recurrent in my early years
I see him calmly standing there.

Fiend from darkness! How he bares
My soul with evil grin so queer
Mocking me with icy stare.

I strike at him with hatred bare!
But, through the shattered cracks of mirror,
I see him calmly standing there
Mocking me with icy stare.
© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Isis
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1 posted 03-11-2000 11:39 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Sir Balladeer, Bravo!!  Nice for you to pop in again.  I miss you big guy.  A wonderful vilanous (?) story  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


Munda
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2 posted 03-12-2000 08:15 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

A great Villanelle Sir ! Enjoyed it very much.  
Janet Marie
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3 posted 03-12-2000 02:10 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

this is great...love the repetative lines and your rhyme is great...all leading up to that perfect ending of who your conflict is with...
i have one of those same mirrors
great job...
take care, jm

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne


Severn
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4 posted 03-12-2000 04:06 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I don't know 'deer - how you do these things are a mystery to me...

awesome anyway, that's all I can say!!


K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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5 posted 03-13-2000 11:00 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Isis....great to be here. I'll try to do it more often.  

Munda....I thank you. Glad you enjoyed it!

JanetMarie...I think we all have that mirror. Your comments are very appreciated.

Severn...Beats me. I'm just trying to work hard to get up to your level!!!
Anthony
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6 posted 03-13-2000 11:16 AM       View Profile for Anthony   Email Anthony   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Anthony

Ive only just joined but am already impressed with the standard of poetry. Very enjoyable, liked the ending especially, the repeating lines giving the pace as well as giving the emotion you feel towards, yourself.
ill_tactics
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7 posted 03-13-2000 05:41 PM       View Profile for ill_tactics   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ill_tactics

I definately felt that icy stare....."tingling down my spine"  Keep up the poetry, Much love, One love, PEACE
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8 posted 03-13-2000 10:37 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Balladeer~ how fun to find you in the Dark! You always blow me away. Excellent! -SEA
TomMark
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9 posted 01-07-2008 08:10 PM       View Profile for TomMark   Email TomMark   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TomMark

you are lying!!!
 
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