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PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2000-03-10 11:08 AM


Somehow I am aware of my consciousness
And can feel the heavy weight of darkness
All around me there is nothing
But I know I am something
Time is not measured nor conceived
Life is something not to be believed
There is no speech in this world
Imagining where in darkness I’m being hurled
Lost I’m not, but found again
The blackness, the absolute nothingness
I give in

Alone, yet I feel other ones
This will be proven if
The journey is ever done
Because of these moments of stillness
And quiet
I feel a sense of otherworldly warmth
And comfort
Though sound is not quite a concept
I can hear my thoughts, and yet,
Still not comprehending what it all means
This world is not a part of my dreams

Sensory deprived, in fetal position
Moving in purest bliss
Towards that bright opening
Then, in a sigh both hopeful
And forlorn,
I break from the darkness and wake;
And am born



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devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
1 posted 2000-03-10 11:18 AM


Sensory deprived, in fetal position
Moving in purest bliss
Towards that bright opening
Then, in a sigh both hopeful
And forlorn,
I break from the darkness and wake;
And am born

great imagery once again.  the ending was great. really loved this one.

aimee


 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

PoeticKnight
Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA
2 posted 2000-03-10 11:22 AM


Thanks aimee. Glad it was ok.
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-03-10 05:52 PM


damn, talk about the poet putting himself in a place and then taking us there...the imagery of emotion in this is awesome...once again the word DEEP comes to mind...

"Time is not measured nor conceived
Life is something not to be believed
There is no speech in this world
Imagining where in darkness I’m being hurled
Lost I’m not, but found again
The blackness, the absolute nothingness
I give in"

loved this one...stalking on.jm


 you're really alone at last...
you're bored and fading fast,
if it's true you'll fall from the past
all you'll have to do is ask
you'll feel but never be
you want and always need
price you pay for wanting to see
will you have all you've ever dreamed...
robin wilson


ill_tactics
Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149

4 posted 2000-03-11 08:32 PM


i dont know how you do it, but you did it again.  I liked this one too, hope you have more in thoughts in your pen. Much love, One love PEACE
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