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~In The Distance~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~In The Distance~ There is a distance in the space between us... now feeling chained by what use to set us free, doubt and discontent only add to the misery... and I can't see you anymore...thru the distance. There are lies in the space between us, trust and faith have passed us by... to the point we cant even look each other in the eye. I don't believe in love anymore...its off somewhere in the distance. There is anger in the space between us, compromise has lost its grace, resentment grows and takes its place. There is a rage deep inside of me...from its hold...I need to find distance. There is pain in the space between us, old wounds and old scars...forever bleed, did we mistake love for an aching need. I need release from this agony, healing is somewhere...in the distance. There is loss in the space between us, patience and passion lost to living a lie, hearts break, dreams fade, then die. There has already been so much taken, my past follows me ... into the distance. There is an emptiness in the space between us, in my heart there's just vacancy ... loneliness keeps me company, with nothing left to hold us here... its safe to say ... we wont make the distance. There is silence in the space between us, the words to save this just cant be found... listen close...as this love leaves...it makes no sound... and I can hear someone else calling to me...off in the distance. Janet Marie *********************** HEY...I just noticed this post makes an even 1000!!! arent you proud of me ISIS  so... do I get a prize LOL  just being here with you all is reward enough (sigh) (smile) < !signature--> ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-07-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Janet Marie this is lovely. You have spoken of all the doubts, the loss of trust, the pain, the anger, and the loneliness that I have been experiencing for quite a while now. I offer my sympathy to you I know it is a very hard journey. The last four lines build up to such an intensity. All hope is gone for the old relationship and yet there is still hope for a new relationship. I especially like "as this love leaves it makes no sound...and I can hear someone else calling to me off in the distance." Very nice hon. I wonder if the one that left me ever loved me in the first place. I don't think so or why was she so unhappy with me? Congratulations on post number 1000. You have posted some fabulous poetry and this is one of your best. I will award you a prize and its red and shaped like a heart. (laugh) |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
1000 posts, how do you do it?  Are you living some reflection of me, jm? Your words, my thoughts, can't tell you how much your poetry means to me. Another fabulous piece by a sensational poet. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Amazing the amount of space distance can take up... more amazing is how full emptiness can feel. Not fufilling, but full, an all encompassing feeling that devours and destroys. Whoa, I'm going off the deep end here. Well done. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Very, very moving piece. There is pain in the space between us, old wounds and old scars...forever bleed, did we mistake love for an aching need. I need release from this agony, healing is somewhere...in the distance. Very cool variations of repetitive phrases. And the emotional wallop...what can i say? |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
very moving and hit very close to home. as i am someone who seems to be watching my love leave...into the distance. great piece. congrats on #1000. aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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mojar Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 169granbury, texas, usa |
very beautifully put, sometimes i think we all hear the voice in the distance. mo |
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Flame Junior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 34Tennessee |
A very touching piece of work. Well written... 1,000??..Wow...Hope I make it there... |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
The last few lines are Incredibly strong and Powerful making a mark upon the reader! You have portrayed the hurt and loss of trust and love so well in this. Kim |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
"patience and passion lost to living a lie". strong feeling here for sure. Really enjoyed reading this because you express so well the feelings when time and feelings place distance between people. Nice work. |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
This was amazing Janet...you introduced me to my feelings in this one. I find myself in the distance...wondering why it seems to tear everything apart. I appreciated this poem very much Carman |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I had noticed you had passed the 1000 mark. Isis is proud of you. Isis congratulates you. And I'll take this opportunity to say in such a short time you have become a valued friend in our Passions family. You are always great responding and welcoming people etc. Thanks hon. CONGRATS  May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you my sweet...coming from you that means A LOT and I feel so grateful to be a part of this special place...love ya, JM Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
Makes my heart hurt JM. This is a nice poem as usual. Keep them coming, I like reading your stuff. Much love, One love, PEACE |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ you rock! This is very emotional and strong. Love it! -SEA |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
JM: this is one of the most beautifully put point of view that makes my heart aches....... well done |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
can i just say...WOW!! every time, girl! your poetry floors me everytime! < |
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