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mojar
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 169
granbury, texas, usa

0 posted 2000-03-07 01:50 PM



river of tears

a tear rolls down my face for you,
and drops so slowly falling down.
followed by another one,
forming puddles on the ground.

puddles turn to little streams,
that trickle past my feet.
tears produced by heartache,
so empty and incomplete.

distance binds my love for you,
and leaves me cold and lonely still.
streams turn into rivers,
from the pain i always feel.

the river finds it's way to you,
soothing sounds that you can hear.
a quiet and simple endless flow,
brings you oh, so ever near.

travel that river to my heart,
there's no rapids in it's course.
calming waters made of tears,
an empty heart it's only source.

mo.

© Copyright 2000 mojar - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
1 posted 2000-03-07 02:00 PM


Very nice poem.  An original idea you put nicely into words.  Good rhyme and structure also.
Well done!

Stevia
Junior Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 28

2 posted 2000-03-07 03:18 PM


I truly enjoyed your poem. I know what it feels like to tear, and I can really relate to this poem. It really touched my heart. thank you.
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-03-07 06:41 PM


mo, this is a perfect as the other one i just read...very emotionally expressed...I feel like i could drown in my own tears sometimes...i just know it...
very good work,jm

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie


danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
4 posted 2000-03-08 12:54 PM


mo, this was wonderful. your words.... always so touching. as you always call me, a poet of the heart is truly what you are.

 i love too much, and not enough.

mojar
Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 169
granbury, texas, usa
5 posted 2000-03-08 11:42 AM


thank you all for your comments.  mo
devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
6 posted 2000-03-08 12:32 PM


your style is very simple and fresh and i absolutely love reading it.  this one was great.  bravo!!

aimee


 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

Artur Hawkwing
Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444
USA
7 posted 2000-03-08 01:10 PM


I can relate to this one in some way, but my teras never come out except in the heart. Really like this! You have talent.
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