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The Battle Cry (on unrequited love)
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The Battle Cry (on unrequited love) |
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sweetsmile New Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 5 |
*** The Battle Cry *** This lost and useless battle Has never yet begun But truth is not past noticing, To know this war can not be won... The solider's heart is breaking, Before ripeness claims its toll... Dreary eyes with river flowing, And fists blood-stained the wall... A cry of grief escapes the chords, Exclaiming lament where love closed doors.... Fierce strength enclasped a hopeless fight, for the seeker in its neverending flight.... Dark shadows of immeasurable pain... Now lays to rest in the deep domain... For a cause of a useless battle, lost, A lasting love, unshared..... remains. --------------------------------------------------- Once I fell in love but I was never even in the position to fight for that love. Thus....this poem. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
The battle continues to be fought my friend. . .because one day. . . we will win. . . Excellent words. . .I know that I have felt this way many times in my life. . . --------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
If love is a two way feeling - should it have to be fought for to begin with? Just a thought. Lovely poem. Michael |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is well writtena and expressed...smooth rhyme flow too...unique way of looking at love...or the fight to hold on to it..take care,janet marie ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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star83 Junior Member
since 2000-02-27
Posts 26SD |
Truly wonderful and just enough rythm. I loved it very much. "True love is like a ghost; everybody talks about it but few have seen it." La Rochefoucauld |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
the poem was very well written. smooth flow, great imagery. i liked it. but i have to agree with micheal. love that is true is not won through battle. |
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