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PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
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New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2000-03-06 10:37 AM


ELEGY
5/8/89

O spirit above understand
My eyes look upon
These, my mortal hands
What hath they wrought?
Ages from now and,
What will they have bought?

I stop and backup a pace
To turn around so
I can stare into a face
Wondering back at me,
As life takes hold,
Winding down to the sea

Like a river running dry
Waiting with thirst,
Drinking tears from my eyes
And my hands are stained
Crimson, as I suppress
The memory and the pain

Is this how it all ends?
Indecision is still a choice
But destruction sometimes mends
So that is the state of mind
In which I choose these words
To express that which you find

If life is but a journey
From here to there
Where is it taking me?
So all I can do
Is look back at the years
And how it all flew

Patiently we are progressing
Some may choose to stop
While others continue digressing

Their restless hearts beat
The unattractive truth
Our dreams take a backseat
To the nameless vision
That seems to divide us
With such cold precision

You can either be this,
Or you can be that,
Whatever to make the list
Not to be cast out
For wanting to be yourself,
To stand up and shout

This is who you really are
Underneath all the layers
Of society there’s something more;
Inside, some kind of reaction
Building up, until,
You take some kind of action

They say it’s elemental biology
But I’ve learned,
In the end, there’s only humanity;
Which breeds it’s own chemistry

A science discovered too late
A science known as you and me

This is only an observation
From my personal point of view
In a state of extreme frustration,
Forgive me for what I do



© Copyright 2000 J.M. Landry - All Rights Reserved
Sven
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1 posted 2000-03-06 01:15 PM


Time does not ask when. . . or why. . .and we can't spend our lives wondering. . . "Why not?" or "What if?"

Powerful words my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Michael
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2 posted 2000-03-06 02:22 PM


Extreme poem, JML.  The emotion is raw, Powerful.  Well done.


Michael

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
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3 posted 2000-03-06 02:28 PM


Thanks Michael...very nice of you. I think i was raw and emotional when i wrote this...*L*.
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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4 posted 2000-03-06 03:51 PM


Is this how it all ends?
Indecision is still a choice
But destruction sometimes mends
So that is the state of mind
In which I choose these words
To express that which you find
--------------
Their restless hearts beat
The unattractive truth
Our dreams take a backseat
To the nameless vision
That seems to divide us
With such cold precision
--------
They say it’s elemental biology
But I’ve learned,
In the end, there’s only humanity;
Which breeds it’s own chemistry

"raw" "emotional" and DEEP!!!!!!!!!!
when you ponder in thought you literally go there...excellent
stalking you still...jm

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie


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