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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554


0 posted 2000-02-28 06:55 PM


~My Heart Senses The Change~


Something inside of me is now uneasy and strange...
unsure of myself...my heart senses the change.
Shadows replace where the light once use to play,
there's an ache in my soul ... where you use to stay.

This distance now between us, is more than my mind can conceive,
the loss my heart feels is more than just my tears can relieve.
I loved you more than my last breath, but you were taken away,
this pain is so hard to get past, the emptiness seems here to stay.

Now that you are gone, I'm not sure what's left of me,
when two is changed in to one...a future is so hard to see.
How does a heart hold the love ... and still let go of the pain,
how does a soul heal, while allowing the love to remain.

I know I just need to give myself ... a little more time...
I console myself writing you these sad verses that rhyme.
In time this pain will pass, and my heart will again breathe,
until then, I continue to live in the constant of this love...in you I still believe.

Janet Marie
1.15.00



 She says baby,
It's 3am I must be lonely,
When she says baby,
Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes,
Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it.
Matchbox20

I love you baby... always.*



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Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
1 posted 2000-02-28 09:11 PM


The pain will pass Janet. . . from your heart to your pen. . . and in its place the sun will shine once again. . .

Thank you, this says a lot to me. . .especially tonight. ..

---------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
2 posted 2000-02-28 10:35 PM


~Janet...

you've made the "sunshine" girl cry...this broke my heart, but at the same time...this is another stage of healing and grieving. this pain you feel now, wont last forever. you will smile and love again. i promise. always believe in yourself, and those who care about u.

amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

star83
Junior Member
since 2000-02-27
Posts 26
SD
3 posted 2000-02-28 10:48 PM


WOW, good sentence structure. It flowed together quite nicely. I feel the love and pain poured into this poem. To loose someone so dear is very hard and all I can offer is my comfort and sympathy..
devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
4 posted 2000-02-29 10:44 AM


thank you janet for touching my soul.  this one reached right in and grabbed me.  i think this one is about me, am i right?  lol.  seriously, its wonderfully expressed and very moving. i hope all your pain subsides.  in the meantime keep writing these wonderful pieces of poetry that make me think.  

aimee


 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 787

5 posted 2000-02-29 11:09 AM


touch a heart imprint your love

i am pure with your touch

i am what i was unsoiled

touching deeply my pain subsides

And my heart once again opens

 Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace,
of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd


blueyz75
Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138
IL
6 posted 2000-02-29 08:10 PM


Once again, sniff sniff  

 I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman


jenifeather
Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 31
Here
7 posted 2000-03-01 12:40 PM


that was amazing. it espesially got to me, i can totally relate. you are a wonderful writer.

jennifer

Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
8 posted 2000-03-01 12:43 PM


very nice, janet, especially

Shadows replace where the light once use to play,
there's an ache in my soul ... where you use to stay.

this is a wonderful expresssion of grief.
jannel


 "I'm just saying
that we've mistaken one
for thousands of words,
and for that mistake
I've caused you such pain
that I damn that word."
-10000 Maniacs "Jezebel"



faith
Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 89

9 posted 2000-03-01 01:56 AM


That was wonderul JM and sad ...
I know rite now u feel that none can understand wht u r feeling and u r rite....yer pain is yer own..and its different from everyone elses.no matter how may hearthearts are out there....it all depends on how u deal with it!i m sure U KNOW  how to fight it!We are with u ...peace faith

Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
10 posted 2000-03-01 03:23 AM


It's a tough place to be when you know things aren't the same anymore.  When two become one the divide back into two, it's hard to visualize any future at all.  Good poem, Janet.


Michael

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
11 posted 2000-03-01 05:49 AM


How to start again, when half of you is gone?
It is hard, beautiful work Janet  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



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