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danni
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since 1999-11-20
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wisconsin

0 posted 2000-02-23 01:00 AM


This was inspired by a conversation I recantly had. And I decided to post it here since Isis was looking for a little something on the lighter side. By no means do I consider this a great piece. I think I do better writing about the "dark" things I have experienced. Anyway, here goes......


You tell me that you are no angel,
that you have your share of flaws.
All that i can say in return is,
"That is why I love you so.
It is these very things that ease
the fear of letting you inside.
I know that you in turn,
do not seek perfection in me.
It is our "flaws" that keep us open
and understanding when mistakes are made.

We realize there is no such thing as "perfect".
If there were, there would be no room
to learn, to develop, and to grow.
These are the elements which build a lasting,
loving, and forgiving partnership
that will withstand the test of time.
Without these, there would be nothing
to strive for, and nothing to achieve.

You need not be "perfect" to be an angel,
for i have felt the warmth of your wings
every time that you comfort me
And I have felt the wind upon my face
as you carry me to places
higher than I have ever been
You convinced me to open my eyes once more
and shown me things I might never have seen.
So you see, my love
Your wings may be invisible to most
but you are an angel in my eyes."


[This message has been edited by danni (edited 02-23-2000).]

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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-02-23 01:08 PM


WOW DANNI...
this is beautiful...perfectly expressed emotions...if you are not comfortable writing on the "lighter" side...it sure doesn't show...this is great... I'm glad you shared it...take care, Janet Marie

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.

Janet Marie

*I miss you baby...
I love you, always.*



Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
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2 posted 2000-02-25 07:17 AM


Coming from a man of many flaws - this is perfect.  Beautiful poem, danni.  Got me all sentimental you did...LOL  Wish the whole world viewed perfection like you do.


Michael

danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
3 posted 2000-02-25 01:46 PM


janet- thank you so very much for your comments. you're always so kind!  
micheal-well, i'm glad this got ya all sentimental. it is quite the compliment when you know your words have touched someone. i too wish the world would view perfection this way. i too have been accused of having many "flaws". like i said, my love has opened my eyes and made me see things a little differently.

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-02-25 06:17 PM


Danni, see you can do well even if it isn't dark!!  This was wonderful and inspiring.  It really moves the reader, well done  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



a-alibaster
Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

5 posted 2000-02-26 10:12 AM


Danni,
I do not oft find a poem that I can relate to that is not of a dark nature, but this is perfect and says so very much!!!
I think it is absolutally wonderful and some thing that I desperatley needed to read today....thank you for a bit of light in an otherwise very dark soul!

 There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul...
a-alibaster

danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
6 posted 2000-02-27 10:46 PM


Isis- thank you so much for your kind words.  i always think my "lighter" poems come out really sappy. this is a reflection of how my love has moved me. he amazes me.
a-alibaster- many thanks to you for the wonderful comments. and you are very welcome. to know that my work touches someone is truly an honor. thanks again.

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
7 posted 2000-02-28 12:13 PM


Danni I'm so pleased for you hon *HUGS*

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
8 posted 2000-02-28 01:11 AM


~danni

this was so moving! i think you write on the "lighter" side just fine. and i like sappy lol...all joking aside, wonderful wonderful poem. Thanks so much for sharing such an intimate part of yourself. yours is the last i am reading and responding to tonight...so now i will have nice dreams. thank you, amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
9 posted 2000-02-28 12:06 PM


Isis- thanks again! and hugs back to you.
Aimster-thank you very much! hope you did have pleasant dreams.  

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