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jenifeather
Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 31
Here

0 posted 2000-02-21 12:15 PM


my boyfriend just broke up with me and i am sort of depressed. somebody help me i am so confused!!!  (this is my first time posting anything so please me gentle in your criticism) well here goes!!!!

Why do I let you hurt me so?
Why do I let myself cry?
Why do I care if you won't look at me?
God damn it, I love you that's why!

Why do I take it so harshly,
when you won't talk just pass by?
Why do I care if you hate me?
God damn it, I love you that's why!

Why do I let your words peirce me,
cut me so deep I could die?
Why do I take them so much to heart?
God damn it, I love you that's why!

and why does your silence hurt worse?
make me wonder why I try?
but I just can't give up on you!
God damn it, I love you that's why!!!!!!



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ChainedAngel
Member
since 2000-01-07
Posts 55
tx
1 posted 2000-02-21 12:39 PM


Depression is tipical for a broken relationship. If you feel you really love this guy. Tell him why he hurts you so much--Because you love him. If he can't return your love, it's not worth wasting the time of day for him. There are other better guys out there in the world. Don't waste your life regretting and hating yourself/someone else for past mistakes. Instead learn and grow from them.

 There is a dream inside a dream. I'm wide awake the more I sleep. You'll understand when I'm dead

- B. Warner

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
2 posted 2000-02-21 10:11 AM


The poem itself was wonderful. I know how you feel though and it's okay to cry and all. You need some time to pull yourself together.You love him and you still care but eventually you'll be strong enough to move on and you'll come to love someone else. I don't know the whole situation so I can't really offer much but you can email me if you would like some more advice from me. I help people a lot with depression...even if it's temporary...so I'm sure I can help. I can't take away the pain, but I can help you get back on your feet.  
Wishing you the best...


 "They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~



Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-02-21 02:10 PM


jeni, welcome to passions, nice to have you here with us...
your poem expresses your emotions very well, did you show it to him?...when I'm hurting like this...being able to write poems is my best medicine...and isnt ironic that most of the time-- our best work comes from the inspiration of our hearts hurting...
feel better...write more
take care, janet marie

 Now for me some words come easy...
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch.
You never knew what I loved in you--
I don't know what you loved in me...
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be...
How long have I been sleeping-
How long have I been drifting alone through the night...
How long have I've dreaming I could make it right...
If I closed my eyes and tried with all my might
To be the one you need...
Jackson Browne



starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
4 posted 2000-02-21 07:24 PM


I dont know why but i disagree w/everyone..i believe that if he deserved your love he wouldnt make you cry...dont tell him how much you love him, he doesnt deserve to know...this is just my humble opinion...please dont take this advice to heart, just think about it make your own decisions, because only you can make the right ones, good luck and welcome to passions! your always welcome here!
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
5 posted 2000-02-21 10:41 PM


Welcome to the passions family.  Liked this poem even though it was so sad.
I agree with Starboards here, if he makes you cry and hurts you, he doesn't love you and that is enough.  Sure you hurt and you are crying, and confused etc.  But a man that does this, is cruel and obviously not in love with you anymore.  Find someone new who loves you for who and what you are.  A kindred spirit, mutual interests etc.  I don't mean to come across as harsh, but by seeing you cry he knows you love him, the fact is he doesn't love you.  Find someone who does.  (HUGS)

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-02-23 03:35 PM


I know when someone we love pulls away from us and we find ourselves standing there all alone with the reality of hurt and pain and loneliness it is a really hard place to be.  We have all been there.  Don't lose hope for a better day.  Very nice poem...lots of anger and I don't blame you.   James
~Venus~
Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128

7 posted 2000-02-26 09:18 AM


I was looking at some of the older poems here...okay, so this one is only five days old. I have been in both of these positions before. And as much as it hurts, if someone doesn't love you, they're not the one for you. But, in my own humble opinion, everyone has a soulmate and yours will be there when your soul recognizes the others. Never give up hope, you will find the person meant for you.

 ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~

I'll be here...why? I'll
be waiting...for what?
'll be waiting for you
so...if you come here,
you'll find me...

I promise.

a-alibaster
Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

8 posted 2000-02-26 10:04 AM


Greetings and welcome to the forum, your words are straight from the heart...the best kind of poetry in my eyes.
The only thing that I can tell you is another useful quote (derived from a very old one) that my grandmother used to tell me....
"If you love some thing set it free
if it does not return to you...
it was never truly yours in the begining."
That may be a harsh way to look at this situation , but believe me, the words have helped me...
good luck and once again welcome to a wonderful place!!!


 There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul...
a-alibaster

Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
9 posted 2000-02-26 10:45 AM


I have not the answers of which you seek.  I can say I have felt the same.  My empathy and my sympathies to you.

michael

blueyz75
Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138
IL
10 posted 2000-02-26 04:49 PM


Welcome, hope you find a home here and come and go as you can.  I know you must hurt like hell but you have to tell him straight out what is up.  Then you will know where you stand or don't stand.  The last true relationship I had we loved each other and we even said it out loud and truly ment it but still had to let go of each other for many reasons.  That hurts more then when there are no feelings shared!  
Have a bandaid!
How old are you anyway, me, I'm 24 cough cough.

Kelly


 I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman


Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
11 posted 2000-02-27 05:27 PM


Hi Jeni

Welcome to Passions! First off have to say to everyone who posted to this poem...you guys are the BEST. Jeni, this was a sensational piece of poetry. I am glad you decided to post and share with us. I hope that you find someone who is worthy of you. This person you speak of certainly isnt!

Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

jenifeather
Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 31
Here
12 posted 2000-02-29 11:48 PM


hi, thanks to everyone that has replied to my poem, i hope you guys read this. and kelly, i am actually only 17. so thanks alot everyone!!!!
Walter Poe
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787

13 posted 2000-03-01 10:41 AM


Welcome to passions

Id like to say something about your situation. I have a friend in similar situation and i know if you do not break away you just could go to pieces take care of yourself first then worry about him you desrve better than to be hurt.


 Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace,
of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd


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