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Michael
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since 1999-08-13
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California

0 posted 2000-02-19 04:54 AM


BRANDED


Darkness, uplift thy blackened wing
From starless skies, memory's sting,
From ancient curse, from ageless tears,
From voiceless cries choking on fears.
For, once, you smiled bright o'er my life,
In promise none render me strife.
Yet, now, every visage appalls,
‘Neath you, alone, a grown man crawls.

What wretched pains, the die been cast
From human eyes beheld steadfast.
In broken dance, per chance cut in,
My every prize become my sin.
That none may touch me where I lie,
As none may heal me as I die,
For none could know the rape of dream
Come slow to steal my self esteem.

Except Death, above, on pale horse
Dripping down dew drops of remorse,
Laughing out loud as to disclaim,
In rotting view, my soul to shame.
‘Er pallid orbs, oh, how they tease.
Doth Death, alas, fear my disease
Or, (my soul branded), not stand ground
To grant bypass the lament found?

Thy mark upon my head run deep.
Proclamation: "My soul to keep."
Whilst friends all look the other way,
Deviation - small price to pay.
Wherefore what challenge hast thou gave?
Both man and spirit, equal, slave.
Thy sculptured beast atop the spire
Where all would fear it ‘fore hell's fire.

With downcast gaze, with solemn tress,
This shadowed path of loneliness
Stands, now, all between you and I,
In hallowed wrath or hollowed cry.
Here, stood before me, wings outspread,
Taking full measure of thy head,
Touching the sheathe, my sword within,
What pleasures writhe by wicked grin.


Michael Anderson




[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 02-19-2000).]

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Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
1 posted 2000-02-19 08:58 AM


This is full of beautiful pain drenched lines. Especially loved "That none may touch me where I lie, As none may heal me as I die," And, as usual, I love your classic style and wording. Few people can use "doth" and "thy" properly and make it sound good, and you do a wonderful job.
Jannel


 "I'm just saying
that we've mistaken one
for thousands of words,
and for that mistake
I've caused you such pain
that I damn that word."
-10000 Maniacs "Jezebel"



hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
2 posted 2000-02-19 11:26 AM


EXCELLENT!!!!!
"In broken dance, per chance cut in,
My every prize become my sin.
That none may touch me where I lie,
As none may heal me as I die,
For none could know the rape of dream
Come slow to steal my self esteem."

Wow, I don't even think I need to tell you how good this one is...other than the one word above...I only have one other word for this one....
PUBLISH!!!!


Mistikman
Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA
3 posted 2000-02-19 11:27 AM


Yet another magnificent poem Michael. I don't know where you find all this talent at, but would you mind leading me there?   But all joking aside, this poem is powerful and deep, and I loved every word in it.
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-02-19 02:46 PM


I've run out of adjectives to compliment your talents...another creation of excellence from one of our favorite resident artists!




take care, janet marie< !signature-->

 Now for me some words come easy...
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch.
You never knew what I loved in you--
I don't know what you loved in me...
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be...
How long have I been sleeping-
How long have I been drifting alone through the night...
How long have I've dreaming I could make it right...
If I closed my eyes and tried with all my might
To be the one you need...
Jackson Browne




[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 02-19-2000).]

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
5 posted 2000-02-21 06:54 AM


Michael, I can't speak, this is awesome.
Shelley
Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263
Ohio, USA
6 posted 2000-02-21 04:36 PM


And then there is "us" who only wish we could write this good.

I love this poem.  yes, PUBLISH!!!

starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
7 posted 2000-02-21 07:17 PM


I agree Shelley, once again, Michael, you have proven yourself! good job!

 "Falling in love is just that - falling.
Sometimes you merely trip and stub your toe.
Sometimes you fall to your hands and knees.
But sometimes you smack your head against the pavement and die."

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