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ill_tactics
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 149


0 posted 2000-02-18 04:03 PM


Have you ever felt that feeling...
Heartfelt and warm...
Had your heart beating...

Ever thought so hard your head hurts...
Engulfed in thoughts full of emotion...
Emersed with visions left to an expert...

Listened to a song and cried till you
couldnt cry no more...
Listening as a tear fell slowly onto the floor...
Lingering feelings in your soul, tightly stored...

Pleaded to God, "please take me away
from this world..."
Peered deep within yourself and...
Pictured yourself in heaven, perfect like a pearl.



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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-02-18 04:50 PM


this is very emotion filled and expressive...
this poem is a "perfect pearl"...please dont be in such a hurry to leave..theres so much left to experience and be inspired about...then you can write more beautiful poems like this one...take care, janet marie

Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
2 posted 2000-02-19 02:02 AM


Interesting form. I like it.
Jannel


 "I'm just saying
that we've mistaken one
for thousands of words,
and for that mistake
I've caused you such pain
that I damn that word."
-10000 Maniacs "Jezebel"



Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
3 posted 2000-02-19 05:06 AM


I think I'd have to say yes on all counts.  Even listening as I watched a tear fall to the floor.  Time seems to slow in such moments for me - is it like that with you?  Great poem!!!


Michael

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-02-20 05:23 AM


I've been there too, time does seem to slow and things that are real seem surreal.  Great work!!  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
5 posted 2000-02-21 07:27 PM


Interesting emotions you express-ill. if your looking for help you have found the perfect place!

 "Falling in love is just that - falling.
Sometimes you merely trip and stub your toe.
Sometimes you fall to your hands and knees.
But sometimes you smack your head against the pavement and die."

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