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~Theres Some Place Else I'd Rather Be~

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 02-18-2000 12:53 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

~Theres Some Place Else I'd Rather Be~

There's a warm breeze blowing,
yet, still I feel a chill.
these feelings surge right through me,
they take me against my will.

Once precious commitments...
they now all leave me cold.

Time is passing so swiftly and I wont be here when I'm old.

I look out at the nite and see-
theres someplace else, I'd rather be...

somewhere along the line, HE, became a part of ME.

This is all wrong, its breaking all the rules,
how many times now, has love made us all--
look like fools.

but even now, I look at you and see-there's someplace else I'd rather be.

Words and hurt get tangled, so much is left untold,
but I listen to my heart and know...
I wont be here ... when I'm old.

Janet Marie



 "Bring it on baby what you getting into...
I swear at once it was the little things that mattered--
But it all seems true to you.
Say the hell with my name and say the hell with my picture...
but swear, for the one time you need me around.
And here I'll stand like it matters...
Only once love gets through then gets scattered by the rain...
But pain gives me the right to be unkind"...
Tabitha's Secret

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ill_tactics
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1 posted 02-18-2000 03:40 PM       View Profile for ill_tactics   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ill_tactics

Nice work as always.  I'm a fool for falling in love, but you have to learn from your foolish experiences.  Much love, One love, PEACE
AVANTI
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2 posted 02-23-2000 02:31 PM       View Profile for AVANTI   Email AVANTI   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AVANTI

have been there...
like i said...i am reminded by you again...

 you don't have to understand completely..to love completely...
remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao


sonjes
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3 posted 02-23-2000 04:04 PM       View Profile for sonjes   Email sonjes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sonjes

Unfortunately, age is relative, and I already feel old, still where I don't want to be.  Are you reading my thoughts, Janet Marie or are you just really that good?
Ok, you are really THAT good!  
Isis
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4 posted 02-23-2000 08:09 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

I've felt this way too JanetMarie.  Is it true knowledge or fanciful dreams?  Why are so many of us ever discontent?  You raised a lot of questions here.  Great piece  
*Namaste*

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


Lady Bere
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5 posted 02-23-2000 10:49 PM       View Profile for Lady Bere   Email Lady Bere   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady Bere

Beautiful piece!  Thank you for sharing such a beautiful and touching poem.
G. A. Webb
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6 posted 02-24-2000 12:26 AM       View Profile for G. A. Webb   Email G. A. Webb   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for G. A. Webb

Very well written Janet. I like this one alot and could relate to it fully (except for the "he" part but I replaced it with "she"). Thank you for sharing it!  

G

 Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't

Michael
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7 posted 02-25-2000 07:23 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

You know, I stayed in a bad marriage for many years for a gazillion different reasons, and in the end, they all ended up wasted years.  You only live once and you may die tomorrow - if there's somewhere else to be, head on don't look back.  Just my opinion, of course.  Lot of depth in this poem - I hope I understood it right, now that I've blurted out my own personal horror story...LOL


Michael
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8 posted 02-25-2000 12:52 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

I have to agree with Michael here. . . you have always go forward. . . never looking back. . . because regret is a cruel mistress. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Aiden Kelly
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9 posted 02-26-2000 11:34 AM       View Profile for Aiden Kelly   Email Aiden Kelly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aiden Kelly

i hear ya.  that was deep, hon.  i like.  i know that feeling and it does feel so wrong but sometimes the right thing is the hardest thing.  )  the last lines are, i think, very well done. (that sounds so vague but i can't quite put my finger on why it hit me so hard...maybe cuz i've been there and i can feel it in my heart again...i don't know...)  but...wow...once again.  )
blueyz75
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I really need to stop reading your writing, I feel like I'm back about two years.     Do you know things about my life no one else here knows or what!

Kelly


 I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman

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11 posted 02-26-2000 06:53 PM       View Profile for patchoulipumpkin   Email patchoulipumpkin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for patchoulipumpkin

I know this feeling very well, a resistance somewhere inside, that doesn't match what's happening.  Well expressed.  I especially enjoyed the line, "somewhere along the line, HE, became a part of, ME"  So true, sometimes you just travel so quickly that you aren't aware of who you are with.  Nicely done.
marc
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12 posted 02-27-2000 04:08 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~Janet Marie~

Girlfriend, you NEVER cease to amaze me...This was awesome! I too have been in this very place, and can relate all too well to the meaning of this piece. The following stanza stood out especialy for me "This is all wrong, its breaking all the rules,
how many times now, has love made us all--
look like fools" YES sometimes love does make us look like fools. But personally for me I'd rather have loved and "lost" than to have never loved at all. Amazing work as always. I feel I can learn much from you!

AMY      

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
baerlon
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13 posted 02-28-2000 11:52 AM       View Profile for baerlon   Email baerlon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit baerlon's Home Page   View IP for baerlon

As always your work is enjoyable.
Well done, although women are not the only ones who have this happen.  It veriers from person to person but you put into word well.

 There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed
serenity blaze
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14 posted 06-15-2005 12:07 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Or? Perhaps we won't feel old when we are THERE.



 
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