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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
i dot my i's and cross my heart and drink my cup of tea i wish that i knew how to start i wish my eyes could see but love is blind i'm so afraid to see is to believe what will i find? and will it fade? can love these fears relieve? my tea is weak my love is strong (if only you could see) it feels so right i can't go wrong (if only you'll agree) where can i go to buy your love? and what price must i pay? how will i know i've had enough? and then - what will you say? will it be "love"? will you be kind and give your heart to me? will it be "love"? or will i find this is not my cup of tea [This message has been edited by Jannel (edited 02-18-2000).] |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Liked this Jannel, your lines are great! "Will this be 'love'? or will I find this is not my cup of tea"  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Jannel..this is SO great... unique and creative... I enjoyed the "cup of tea" methaphore...and the rhyme pattern is great too..very nice work!!  take care, janet marie "Bring it on baby what you getting into... I swear at once it was the little things that mattered-- But it all seems true to you. Say the hell with my name and say the hell with my picture... but swear, for the one time you need me around. And here I'll stand like it matters... Only once love gets through then gets scattered by the rain... But pain gives me the right to be unkind"... Tabitha's Secret |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
wow this is so cool the way it ends. i was blown away by it. excellent and catchy. thank you for your replies to some of my works as well. great poem. aimee |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
i agree with all before. very good, catchy, and enjoyable. great work! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice. Another way to look at rejection. James |
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Bronx Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 84Oviedo, Florida, U.S. |
Yes- I liked the ryhming and everything. It was really kewl. Poetically yours Bronx Be careful! It's a jungle out there! |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
good work... i liked it a a lot you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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