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a-alibaster
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 392


0 posted 2000-02-17 11:16 PM



There will be no angels to spread their
wings to carry me to heaven
for I have dwelled in my darkness
far too long.
There will be no angels to sing
a sweet, heavenly song
for I will never grace guilded gates
upon my dieing.
There are some, such as I
whos wings
are held on with nothing more than tattered strings
that bow upon blackened knees to cry.


 There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul...
a-alibaster

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Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
1 posted 2000-02-17 11:23 PM


Wow. Such a beautiful image. "There are some, such as I whos wings are held on with nothing more than tattered strings that bow upon blackened knees to cry." This is a beautiful image. I am greatly impressed.
jannel


 "I'm just saying
that we've mistaken one
for thousands of words,
and for that mistake
I've caused you such pain
that I damn that word."
-10000 Maniacs "Jezebel"



Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-02-17 11:38 PM


Lovely imagery here, but hey only mass murderers, rapists etc. don't go to heaven, if you do unto others as you want them to do unto you, I believe you will find your rewards.  Don't look ahead, focus on each day at a time and make it a masterpiece!!
The rewards WILL follow... (HUGS) and well done  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-02-18 12:45 PM


beautifully sweet sad poem Alibaster...
as said above, lovely imagery...
and even torn and tattered...an angels wings still fly...(smile)
take care, janet marie

 "Bring it on baby what you getting into...
I swear at once it was the little things that mattered--
But it all seems true to you.
Say the hell with my name and say the hell with my picture...
but swear, for the one time you need me around.
And here I'll stand like it matters...
Only once love gets through then gets scattered by the rain...
But pain gives me the right to be unkind"...
Tabitha's Secret


devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
4 posted 2000-02-18 01:38 PM


i sometimes wonder if there is a way out of this darkness we dwell in.  tattered strings may be all thats holding your wings on but they are still there and only by healing will they ever serve their purpose.  just a thought.  strong words, stronger meaning.  

sincerely,
aimee

danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
5 posted 2000-02-18 07:38 PM


i am in complete agreement with devin. what is tattered can be re-sewn. sadly beautiful image.
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