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hostile
New Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 6


0 posted 2000-02-16 10:16 PM


This is about how sometimes I get hostile and just life and its wrong doing. Truthfully, I don't know why I wrote it. It was just one of those days. Its the other side of the moon I guess you can say.
(please respond to my poem. Note this is my first poem on here, Thanks)

Hostile

Almost everyday,
I see the same face
on broken picture tube
it fits the attitude
If you could see yourself,
you put you on a shelf,
your verbal masterbate, promise to nausiate
today i'll play the part of a non-parent,
not make a hundred rules
for you to know about yourself


Not lie and make you believe what's evil,
is making friends, and meeting God your own way,
the right way
In turn your making me hostile

the truth in right and wrong,
the boundaries of the law,
you seem to miss the point, arresting for a joint?!
you seem to wonder why
hundreds of people die,
you're writing tickets man,
I got mad, they ran!

Now i'll play a public servant,
to serve and protect by the law and the state
I'd bust the punks that rape, steal, and murder,
and leave you be, if you crossed me,
i'd shake your hand right away
like a man, not a god

They put it in your head,
then put you in your bed,
he's watching, say your prayers,
cause'God is everywhere

Now i'll play a man learning priesthood,
who's about to take the ultimate test in life,
I'd question things because I am human,
and call no one my father who's no closer than
a stranger
I won't listen
I'm hostile!



 A New Level

© Copyright 2000 Raphael Owens - All Rights Reserved
The Haunted Poet
Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 37
Sumner Washington
1 posted 2000-02-17 12:08 PM


Congratulations on your first poem! It is an excellent poem and I love the part about you being a public servant! Welcome to Passions..... Dark Passions.......
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-02-17 12:19 PM


Welcome to passions and the dark forum.  No need to tell you, you fit in dark very well.
This was great really enjoyed it, awaiting more.  Welcome  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-02-17 12:31 PM


hostile...
add my welcome to passions!! nice to have you here...your first post makes quite an impression...very thought provoking and makes a lot of good points and statements...
good work!!! look forward to more.
janet marie

 When you look in the mirror...
Wish you were somebody else
Just a perfect reflection
You and no one else...
Minutes run into hours
Hours run into days
You're still waiting for someone
Who never ever came...
Go and run through the hallways
Find your way to the door
You will end up like always
Back where you were before...
Then you look in the mirror
Wish you were somebody else
But it's still your reflection
You and no one else...
Guster


devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
4 posted 2000-02-17 10:39 AM


very well said.  i like to think of myself as annoyed, as opposed to hostile.  but hostile works just fine for you it seems.  i especially like the mentions of God in this, and i took them to mean people pushing you to understand and know God, but not accepting that you may not feel the same as they do.  I'm facing a situation like that right now and yes, i do believe it makes me hostile.  welcome, this place is great.

 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
5 posted 2000-02-17 11:48 AM


let me also welcome you. this piece was great. frustration is all part of being human. it's not hard to feel frustrated and a little hostile in this world. looking forward to more of your work.
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