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devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio

0 posted 2000-02-16 12:19 PM


Oh to consume you
to taste that which fills my dreams
to take the abundance of life
overflowing love
true and complete happiness
untested sanity
and fill the void in my life
complete the circle of me
stop the tears that stream from my soul
with the love that flows from yours
and put an end to my sorrow
Oh, to comsume you


 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

© Copyright 2000 Aimee - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-02-16 03:28 PM


"stop the tears that stream from my soul
with the love that flows from yours"...


WOW...I LOVE that verse...its beautiful...and the wish of being consumed...very nice work!!
take care, janet marie


 "...we were born before the wind...also younger than the sun...
and my heart you have won...as we sailed into the mystic...
I just want to rock your gypsy soul-
just like in the days of old...
and together we will float-into the mystic...
Van Morrison


The Haunted Poet
Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 37
Sumner Washington
2 posted 2000-02-17 12:12 PM


I can relate to this poem very nicely. I also love that verse Janet. It describes a lot of emotions at once. Perfect.
danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
3 posted 2000-02-17 01:34 AM


i loved this poem! very well written, swinging the pendulum of emotions. and if i may brag      i have tasted that which fills my dreams......i have consumed! this described exactly how i feel about my current love. came exactly when i needed him.
ok-that's enough!  


[This message has been edited by danni (edited 02-17-2000).]

ill_tactics
Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149

4 posted 2000-02-17 02:29 PM


I wish a twinky would love me like that...haha  But this was nicely written, I've felt that void once too often.  Much love, One love, PEACE
JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2000-02-17 03:28 PM


The desirablility of Love which compels us to find a special one and allows us to experience loves fulfillment and happiness.
James

Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
6 posted 2000-02-17 05:30 PM


Wonderful expression!  You leave the reader feeling your innermost desires.
"complete the circle of me".  
Very nice poem with such sincerity.
Danny

Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
7 posted 2000-02-17 05:38 PM


I very mucch like the idea of consuming someone in love. Good work.
Jannel


 "I'm just saying
that we've mistaken one
for thousands of words,
and for that mistake
I've caused you such pain
that I damn that word."
-10000 Maniacs "Jezebel"



Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
8 posted 2000-02-17 08:33 PM


No greater feling than that of being consumed in love, by love.  Beautifully written  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



gypsyqlt
Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 147
Bradford,Vt USA
9 posted 2000-02-18 12:15 PM


This was just beautiful !  I love the repeat of the line"oh to consume you".  Great work.
Jocelyn

devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
10 posted 2000-02-18 10:02 PM


i hate to do this but i just felt the need to thank you all for your replys.  they mean alot to me.  ive never shared my work with many and ive always wanted a way to.  this is my chance.  i was owndering how to get you to reply more, and i thought maybe if i thanked you all, and replyed more often to you, i would get more replys so thats what im gonna do.  thank you so much again.

in love,
aimee


 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

hostile
New Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 6

11 posted 2000-02-19 11:25 AM


Dear Aimee,
   You have my deepest thanks. This piece has touch me. I know it all to well. You have my love and sincerity for this one.

Ophelia Speaks
Junior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 11
suburbia, IL
12 posted 2000-02-19 11:46 AM


I happened on this poem by chance and its one of my new faves!!! I think there's something in all of us that the aspect of consuming someone in love really touches.  WRITE MORE!!!
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