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~No Longer Feeling Fascination~
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~No Longer Feeling Fascination~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Words lose their reason, verse lose the rhyme. Pain is now in season... slowing the passage of time. Anticipation lost to resignation, anguish inscribed in tears. No longer feeling fascination, too many losses in too few years. Promise is just an illusion... immersed in all the lies. Denial adds to confusion, intentions explained with alibis. Habitual in confession, apologies become an addiction. Solitude is of concession, loneliness becomes an affliction. Futures lack definition inspiration ceases to exist, unsure of fate's premonition... but just too damn tired to resist. Janet Marie "...we were born before the wind...also younger than the sun... and my heart you have won...as we sailed into the mystic... I just want to rock your gypsy soul- just like in the days of old... and together we will float-into the mystic... Van Morrison |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
A kaliedoscope of emotions we all feel at times Janet Marie. This was great, I felt it all whilst reading. Bravo  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
those last four lines really caught my mind and i just kept reading it over and over. amazing!! i really look forward to reading more from you. |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
Hey Janet, I understand where you are headed. When I pause while writing, sometimes these bitter thoughts recur. Your expansive vocabulary is evident in this poem. I wasn't sure what "premonition" meant but I have a pocket dictionary now. (opens dictionary, looks at premonition--"forewarning" YES! I just learned another new word!) Something good came out of this poem..... why not smile? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hey Artur... Okay---you made me smile...thanks...as for my "expansive vocabulary"...well, lets just say I owe it all to my good friend Webster... as in dictionary, Thesaurus, and other tools of the trade...and I had an amazing mentor who taught me to strive for more poetic words...(thank you DC.)(love ya) who knew those cranky ole English teachers back in high school were so wise...(smile)...synonym-- homonym-- antonym...remember when these use to be bad words...lol... thanks to Isis and devinmaria too for the kind words  take care, janet "...we were born before the wind...also younger than the sun... and my heart you have won...as we sailed into the mystic... I just want to rock your gypsy soul- just like in the days of old... and together we will float-into the mystic... Van Morrison |
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moebius Junior Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 11 |
I can really empathise (if that's the right word) with this poem, going through such down times every so often myself. |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
feeling rather bad here after you replied to my poems about not replying to enough of yours Superior poetry should always come first my apologies i will reply to you more often yours Walter Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace, of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Habitual in confession, apologies become an addiction. Solitude is of concession, loneliness becomes an affliction. Excellent Janet. The rhyme scheme was perfect Jennifer |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
Youre a wonderful poet. I liked this poem, think I'll make it one of my favorites. I liked it. Obviously, your words did not lose their, or your verses lose their ryhme, opposite from your opening statement. Excellent job, two thumbs up. Much love, One love, PEACE |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Pain is now in season". Sometimes pain is all around us and I think that thought sums my feelings up really good. Hey, why so much pain, is this the season for pain? Actually I'm feeling good right now and I enjoyed this very much. James |
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Lady Bere Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73Valmeyer, Illinois USA |
As I read your poem I could feel the emotion. I've got that energized sensation I get when a poem is magical. The words, the rhythm, it all just flows together into a portrait of feelings. You are a phenomenal artist!< !signature--> Without darkness there is no light Without the light we cannot see the dark Balance...It heals the soul -- by: LB [This message has been edited by Lady Bere (edited 02-16-2000).] |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
this poem was like looking in mirror. excellent work as usual. |
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