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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Taste tact irrepresible facts bend on everyone create space STOP Every bird and bee could fall I could no more than ignore all STOP All creation cracked and torn brakes are shocked old and worn STOP Every hole around could swallow up All the other jealous girls STOP My creature of spite and pain Beautiful come summer ice or rain STOP Why should i think all this so I tell you because its who you are STOP Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace, of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Walter...very creative, and different...I'd be very curious to know your meaning and inspiration for this, (if I may ask)(smile)...what was your intentions for the use of STOP between each verse? Well, Im on to your next post...seems you are inspired today...janet marie "...we were born before the wind...also younger than the sun... and my heart you have won...as we sailed into the mystic... I just want to rock your gypsy soul- just like in the days of old... and together we will float-into the mystic... Van Morrison |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Ok this poem is lots of little messages on the same subject each message has a stop in it like an old telegraph message thought it may give a bit of life to the piece |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
Subliminal messaging???? hahaha This was in interesting one, I liked the little STOPS in between. Makes a person wonder. Much love, One love, PEACE |
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