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The Desperate Ones
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The Desperate Ones |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. 
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I must admit I swiped the title from a song by Jaques Brel. If you've never heard any of his work, check it out. He would have felt at home in this forum. -The Desperate Ones- Searching the land They reach for a hand To hold throughout the night Don't tell them 'No' They won't let go Until they see some light And they have had The good and the bad But nothing seemed to last And they have lied And they have cried Throughout their shadowed past And if you see Them holding me You'll see that I am crying Don't send them away It's just my way To keep my soul from dying |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
"The mass of men live their lives in quiet desperation". A quote I thought of while reading your poem. Your poem has a lot of feeling. Well done! D |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this one is beautiful, I really liked its emotions and it reads very well, the rhyme flows great.. I love the last 2 lines, perfect! take care, janet marie ...found your heart-then lost your lover...licked your wounds then run for cover... take your time...there will be another... and dont make the same mistake twice... unless you can pay the price... Dan Fogelberg |
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Lady Bere Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73Valmeyer, Illinois USA |
Good poem! I know it touched me. Without darkness there is no light Without the light we cannot see the dark Balance...It heals the soul -- by: LB |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Touching piece, I'm sure Jacques would be honoured with it  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
Thank you all for your welcoming words and encouragement. I don't have very regular net access so you may not hear from me for awhile but I WILL be back! |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
The last two lines spoke volumes..Well Done. Jennifer |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Such a nice flow to this. James |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
"Dont' send them away, it's just my way to keep my soul from dying." Beautiful line. Jannel |
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