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baerlon
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Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA

0 posted 2000-02-12 01:05 AM


Hovering about my mind the storm gathers
Forces of nature of which can never be controlled
My premonitions have been shatter and hopes denied
I struggle to breath as the air thins around me
Pressing on the world spins faster than I can move
Disorientated I stumble dropping “that” which I once cared
As I go to pick “that” up, it cuts my hand
I have been worn down and buried half way at “that” ’s hands
Angered I turn and walk away, saving what’s left
Leaving “that” behind never to turn back, never to think twice
A new path lies before my life … leading far from here
Understanding this horror is not something I wish to do
Something about the way the night blends with the horizon pushes me
Forward the path leads though the briars and thorns
Yet along this painful path there is no “that” to disappoint
So I walk … I walk away.



 There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
(Creed)
baerlon

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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-02-12 01:05 PM


baerlon,
this is an incredible poem, so well written and full of emotion and expression. I like the use of "that" to replace the emotion your speaking of...or not speaking of(smile)
and I like the ending lines...very good work.
take care, janet marie

 ...found your heart-then lost your lover...licked your wounds then run for cover...
take your time...there will be another...
and dont make the same mistake twice...
unless you can pay the price...
Dan Fogelberg



baerlon
Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197
Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA
2 posted 2000-02-12 08:16 PM


Thanks Jan,  if you really want to know what "that" stands for it is freinds.  Wow theres some good english.  arr But you can put what ever fits in your life in it's place.  That is the beuty of poetry
Well anyway thanks again < !signature-->

 There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
(Creed)
baerlon


[This message has been edited by baerlon (edited 02-12-2000).]

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