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Name: "Reflection" Topic: "Self-Impressionism"
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Name: "Reflection" Topic: "Self-Impressionism" |
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EMG Junior Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 10 |
Just a note: I wrote this because times are bad. The only person I have ever loved -- the only person that has ever treated me right and loved me just for me – abandoned me two days before Christmas. Since then, my life has been a twenty-four hour misery. I would really like if people wrote back and gave me opinions as well as suggestions for minor changes. Thank you. EMG Reflection I look at you. You look at me. I wonder why It is you I see. I turn my head. You turn yours too. Why are times so hard? What can I do? Your appearance, it haunts me. I hate you so. I want to be rid of you. I wish you would go. But I know it is hopeless, And you will always be. You will never abscond. You are a part of me. I try to forget you, But all is in vain. I see your essence of others And always feel pain. For eighteen long years You have been by my side. So why now must I hate you? Why can’t I abide? I now stand before you And gaze in your eyes. Of all people I hate Only you I despise. While surveying your body I see no chance for redemption. You are my worst enemy. My image, my own reflection. -EMG 02/08/2000 < !signature--> [This message has been edited by EMG (edited 02-12-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
EMG... first of all welcome to Passions...the people here are amazing and supportive... I'm so sorry for your pain...I understand it all too well...as for the poem... It is Excellent!!!...the view from which it is written...the way you speak to your self, and the ending is perfect. I wouldnt change a thing of the poem...but I hope you change your mind about the person who looks back at you...this poem tells us the relection of a talented poet is in there somewhere. take care, janet marie "...she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough...I'm a little bit rusty...and I feel like my head is caving in, and I dont know if I've ever been really loved- by a hand thats touched me, and I feel like somethings gonna give...and I'm a little bit angry... Well...this aint over..NO not yet...not while I still need you around"... matchbox 20 |
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EMG Junior Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 10 |
Janet, Thank you for your response. It was the first affirmation I got for the poem and it means so much to me--more than you could ever imagine. Times are rough in my life and I don't know what is ahead for me, but rest assured I have more poems in the making that I will post to this wonderful community. Eli |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
i am in agreement with janet. there is nothing you need to change. and i could completely relate to the poem. i saw that person in the mirror for two long years before i started to notice subtle changes. take it from one who knows. it does get better, and there is someone out there for you. writing is a wonderful way of relieving some of the pain, it has worked miracles for me in the short time i have been doing it. (and of course it has something to do with some incredible people i have met here in passions)  So with all that rambling, welcome to passions. hope you enjoy your time here and i look forward to more of your work. take care Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Well I have to agree with Danni completely on this. Don't change a thing it is fine, really. ANd welcome to Passions, I'm sure you will like it here in our family Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
This is a very powerful poem. At first, I thought you were talking about a lover. Welcome to Passions, Eli. Great entrance! ~Gene |
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