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Michael
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0 posted 2000-02-08 10:27 PM


COLD SILENCE

All I want to do is hold her,
She's laying right here next to me.
I want to feel her head on my shoulder,
The way it was meant to be.
I know this woman inside out,
Our souls danced when apart.
But something's wrong, there is no doubt,
And it's breaking my heart.

She doesn't look me in the eye,
She doesn't hold my hand.
She doesn't care anymore that I cry,
Or care if I understand.
But as I've said before, I know her well,
What dreams her eyes may see.
It was only left for Time to tell
She wouldn't see those dreams in me.

I lay here, cold, yet still love her.
Silence foretells she'll soon be gone.
Every star shining above her,
One more I've only wished upon.
And every hope I've dared to dream
Lost to a dimmened eye.
While every whisper on the wind would seem
Her unspoken goodbye.

Michael Anderson

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 It's the little things you take for granted,
That'll mean the most to you when they're gone.








[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 02-09-2000).]

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danni
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1 posted 2000-02-09 12:03 PM


this touched so deeply within me. i have been the woman of which you write. i was driven to that point though-but tried to fight the love that was dieing inside-just got tired of fighting a battle i was losing.
when all said and done-he was left with regret. ( this really stirred something up-i could go on and on)
neway-deep, and felt even deeper-as usual. well done micheal.


 Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear.
-Tool-

Pepper
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2 posted 2000-02-09 05:24 PM


This breaks my heart....
Beautifully written Michael..

Munda
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3 posted 2000-02-09 05:42 PM


Very sad and heartbreaking...sigh...
Bronx
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4 posted 2000-02-09 05:49 PM


Yes-
It was good but sad!  I can only hope that when that happens to me AGAIN!  I 'll have the nerve to mmove on or keep trying!
Poetically yours
Bronx


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It's a jungle out there!


Janet Marie
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5 posted 2000-02-09 08:05 PM


another very beautiful touching poem, full of emotion and expression.
another well written piece of work, I dont know how I missed it yesterday.
take care, janet marie

 "...she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough...I'm a little bit rusty...and I feel like my head is caving in,
and I dont know if I've ever been really loved- by a hand thats touched me, and I feel like somethings gonna give...and I'm a little bit angry...
Well...this aint over..NO not yet...not while I still need you around"...
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Poet deVine
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6 posted 2000-02-09 08:47 PM


Sometimes it's hard to say what you feel..maybe the girl in the poem couldn't express her feelings? Very good.. but so sad...
TanAngel
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7 posted 2000-02-09 09:15 PM


Beautiful. I know what it is like when love dies...it hurts. More than words can tell...except in poetry. I think this one is great!!

 "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel

AVANTI
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8 posted 2000-02-10 12:24 PM


It moved me...
it's painfull when you losing slowly the one you love...and somehow throught all of it in all that pain one goes through...you never stop loving her/him...
"I lay here cold yet still love her..."
simply...beautiful...

 you don't have to understand completely..to love completely...
remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao



Christopher
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9 posted 2000-02-10 04:06 AM


I knew that if I were to come in here tonight, I would find somethign by you that would mirror my feelings. Thank yu for not disappointing me, my friend. Again, you have spewed from your soul, echoes to match mine.
Michael
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10 posted 2000-02-10 08:20 AM


Danni, I'm glad this poem reached you in such a manner.

Pepper, mine too.

Bronx, you're right, love is something one should never give up on...always keep trying.

PdV, I hope you're right.  I guess time will tell.

AVANTI, definately hard to let go, even through the pain.

Chris - I think we are most definately emotionally linked.

Munda, Janet, TanAngel, thank you so much for your kind replies.

michael

JOY 14
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11 posted 2000-02-10 05:23 PM


"What dreams her eyes may see"  I seemed to like this line more than any other.  I'm not sure why.  

Joy

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12 posted 2000-02-10 06:03 PM


Heartwrenching   I feel for you, your pain is evident
Jesse Jaymz
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13 posted 2000-02-10 06:25 PM


wow.  this one really hit home with me.  i am going threw some rough times too.  and this is exactly how i feel.  and alas i to must say goodbye to her.  it is a very hard thing to do.  i must go now cuz i am gonna cry.  great poem.

 Then it comes to be that the soothing light at the end of your tunnel is just a frieght train coming your way...
MetallicA

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14 posted 2000-02-10 07:59 PM


Michael.  I feel your pain.  It is sad to know that love is there for you but it's just not "in the moood" to be your friend right now.  Hang in there and keep the poems flyin.  Eli
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15 posted 2000-02-11 11:44 AM


This poem reminded me not of a woman, but of me and the love I never started, or the love he never gave me.  This poem is full of emotion, some which rolled down my cheek....

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16 posted 2000-02-11 01:35 PM


Michael. . .

there are no words for the pain that you feel. . . but just hold on my friend. . .you will know soon. . .

---------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


dvlishimp
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17 posted 2000-02-12 08:18 AM


It is unfortunate that this has happened. But, I knew and said nothing. Another new as well, and offered friendship. Now cast out from that and this.
What prices we pay for knowledge.
I will say nothing more on this.

Michael
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18 posted 2000-02-12 11:14 AM


dvlishimp,
      
It will be unfortunate if things don't work out for Gen and I but I must say that even if they don't, it is not unfortunate what I have shared with her.  She has given me hope where I had none before, she has given me love I never felt before.  If I could take any of our relationship back, I wouldn't change one thing.  We have made mistakes, as all people will.  We will either overcome these mistakes and move forward or we won't, but in either case I would call such a statement from you premature at best.
      
Personally, I view an "I knew" from you as an "I told you so" from the other party you mention.  I don't think either of your opinions are honorable at this point.  You don't know anything on my behalf.  If Gen and I were to never speak again, she would still stand higher in my eyes than any lover and any friend I've ever had and I hardly view myself as that tarnished in her eyes.
      
If you "knew" anything about me, you would know that my poetry is an extension of my feelings more so than an extension of reality.  I stretch my poetry to the fullest extent of the emotion I am trying to portray so my feelings better reach the reader, also to release or purge that emotion from myself as poetry is often the only source of release I have for it.
      
If you "knew" something about Gen that I didn't (and still don't), then truly your comment was most inappropriate and I am glad to hear you will say nothing further.


Everyone else, I truly thank you for the kindness and compassion in your replies.


Michael



[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 02-12-2000).]

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